Arena vs. Agent KOBA

Arena vs. Agent KOBA

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355 points
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by ledes87

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ledes87
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# 24   Posted: Mar 27 2012, 11:07 AM
Hello A.X! start by Hiemie, I forgot to put the references on which comic read before reading this. This story happens before comic "Anya vs Hiemie the Fishboy",but it is interesting to read that before.
Koba promised to turn Hiemie into a cartoon character, only if he helped in a couple of missions. There begins the relationship between these characters ... although I develop better in the future :P

The story of the princess is an allegorical way of telling the past of Arena. Koba knows how to wake Seth in Arena. First he needed to find the mask of Seth, and after a few days she was awakened by the sound of the cymbal monkey toy. A sound that always disturbed Seth. So Koba can awaken Seth when he wants, and when not needed, she will be Arena again :)!

Hope that helps! Thanks for the comment, and sorry for my awful english!

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# 23   Posted: Mar 26 2012, 04:34 PM
Pyras- Well, I understand that life gets in the way, especially when it comes to work, so I'll forgive the quality section of your battle. So instead, I'm going to critique your story. First off, the first page. Talking about the "story so far" bit. It does bring up to date what's happening, but don't you think it would have been better to show what the attack on the Orphanage looked like rather than say what was happening? It would have shown much more development and build up to the fight that followed. Which brings me to my next critique.

I felt there was too much dialogue happening during the big fight between Arena and Koba. It really does look like the fight was going to be good, I was looking forward to it, but it wasn't necessary and it took too much away from the action. You've heard the phrase 'Actions speak louder than words', right? use a minimum amount of dialogue next time, because no one wants to be distracted by everything KOBA had to comment about Arena during their fight.

Then finally, the ending. The last page was too abrupt for a conclusion. Again, it would have been nicer if you showed the conclusion of that fight as well instead of just saying what happened. I remember you also saying you had plans about continuing from here, but this is just me asking, did you ask Dure, or any of the orphanage gang members about the plan? since it's about an important part of the Orphanage, I think it's best to let them know what you had in mind for your story picking up from here. Again, work got in the way, so thanks for posting what you had in the end.


Ledes - Really impressed with what you pulled out, man. I did notice you had some grammar issues in some pages here and there, maybe have a friend read over it next time to spot the mistakes so you can fix it for easier reading. I will say that I was a bit more confused with two parts, one with hiemie in it, and the end of your comic. It's probably just me, but was that Arena herself, or the princess? What was hiemie's purpose in that comic? It could just be me and I need to re-read it again to see I'm I'm missing something, but those were the only two things that made me wonder what was happening.

besides those two parts, it was pretty well done. Though it was a bit talkative, I think it was necessary for it since it builds up to your interpretation of Arena's past. Enjoyed the read none the less.

ledes87
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# 22   Posted: Mar 25 2012, 08:18 PM
Well, first of all, I want to thank Pyras for the fight. I love your version of Koba/Bako. Your story is very interesting, and your action scenes are always spectacular! I know that you could not finish for work, but what could you do and show was awesome!

Mintley - Thank you!!, yes, I may have to resolve some transitions within the comic. I had to resolve some things without much time, so some inks are not very well defined, I decided to spend half the time the colors, maybe this has influenced some frames and even pages with no backgrounds.

Coatl - Mmmm, well, between anger and pain Arena remembered who she was. Koba needed to take the limit Arena emotions, so she could return to being Seth, a future general war. But before going to war, Koba needs the oracle called Nausicaa that will reveal an unexpected future! (spoiler!!) :)

Hiemie-Thanks dude!

Thanks William, I will try to do my best to make an interesting story with both, Huesitos and Koba!

DrkDysOfDre - Thanks men! I used two programs, SAI and photoshop 7.0, these are the only two programs that know how to use, plus the help of a wacom tablet I'm trying to learn to use :P

Sorry for my awful english, I'm using a page of translation English/Spanish.

DrkDysOfDre
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# 21   Posted: Mar 25 2012, 05:54 PM
great work both of you! love the work you guys put down. Ledes, did you use marker for color? or is it some really convincing ps work?  The color and shading are beautiful...

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# 20   Posted: Mar 24 2012, 07:47 PM
EDIT: I'll post my crit here later.

      Edited Mar 24 2012,  07:47 PM by William_Duel

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# 19   Posted: Mar 24 2012, 07:47 PM
Mistake.  IGNORE ME.

      Edited Mar 24 2012,  07:47 PM by William_Duel

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# 18   Posted: Mar 24 2012, 07:46 PM
Just a quick comment, crit later:

Ledes I really enjoyed your story!  Since I have always followed the Huesitos/Bako storyline, I feel like it's a really epic story and this latest comic really felt like a turning point.  I really hope you get to follow through.  I like the twist that Arena is some sort of Goddess in your version and that it fits within Bako's manipulations.  

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# 17   Posted: Mar 24 2012, 12:32 PM
I'll try a full writeup after work.

But before that, I will say I was very impressed by Ledes comic.

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# 16   Posted: Mar 24 2012, 12:16 PM
what the fuck just happen in ledes' story?

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# 15   Posted: Mar 24 2012, 10:18 AM
I'm glad that at least my story was decent~

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# 14   Posted: Mar 24 2012, 10:01 AM
Pyras: sorry you couldn't finish, all of the finished panels and pages look fantastic! You really built it up well I thought, I was very eager to read through it, despite the unfinished pages.  It had a really good flow and urgency to it. The only real negative thing I'd say (aside from the unfinished panels, but hey that happens) is the large amount of text in that last panel on page 4.  the text itself is very blocky and the word bubble is very large, it reads like it should've been split up.  Of course that would've required more drawing as well, so I can see why you might choose to leave it all together.

Ledes: I honestly haven't read very much of Koba, but wow, that was an incredibly interesting story.  There were a few points where I felt Koba himself sort of 'teleported', like he was suddenly in a different place when he had been in a previous place, without explanation.  Even if he might be able to do that, it seems a bit strange and kind of confused me.  The artwork was fantastic and very consistent, I'm interested in seeing where this story takes you!

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# 13   Posted: Mar 24 2012, 08:21 AM
thanks :]

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# 12   Posted: Mar 24 2012, 08:10 AM
Sorry for the lack of thumbnails, I'm not home at the moment and won't be until much later in the day so I figured you guys would rather this go up now than wait for thumbnails.

ledes87
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# 11   Posted: Mar 23 2012, 03:27 PM
Uploaded!!!!

PyrasTerran
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# 10   Posted: Mar 19 2012, 04:37 PM
That job is FINALLY behind me.. but with 4 days left and only 2 pages completed, let us see if I can pull off some kind of March miracle :(

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# 9   Posted: Mar 13 2012, 10:41 AM
Thanks much~ I wanna keep up my streak of completed works.

Angie
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# 8   Posted: Mar 13 2012, 08:21 AM
Deadline extended by 1 week. No more extensions can be applied to this battle now.

PyrasTerran
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# 7   Posted: Mar 12 2012, 10:48 PM
I need to request an extension.

I'm one of only 3 editors at the production company I'm at, and one of them decided to quit this very morning, leaving me to take care of an infamously temperamental LA director since he doesn't like the 2nd editor that is left besides myself. So my days are packed for the next few.

Not sure how to set up an extension with this new interface, which is why I'm saying this here...


      Edited Mar 12 2012,  10:49 PM by PyrasTerran

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# 6   Posted: Mar 4 2012, 07:11 AM
vamos ledes hacela mierda!

fuck him pyrasterran!


Angie
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# 5   Posted: Feb 26 2012, 08:24 AM
Good luck you two!

JCee
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# 4   Posted: Feb 25 2012, 07:04 PM
Totally can't wait for this one!

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# 3   Posted: Feb 24 2012, 11:47 PM
*squees with glee!*

Shit SON!

Coatl
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# 2   Posted: Feb 24 2012, 10:27 PM
:000

Cracking Skulls
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# 1   Posted: Feb 24 2012, 10:26 PM
UH OH

DOES THIS MEAN SHIT'S GONNA GET REAL?

Comic Details -

 
Drawing Time: 3 weeks
Ended: Mar 30th, 2012
Votes Cast: 19
Page Views: 1643
Winner: ledes87
 

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