Intro Story / Will
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# 6
Posted:
Dec 15 2010, 08:49 PM
I'm ready to see what you have to offer; your character seems funny.
# 5
Posted:
Dec 10 2010, 03:32 PM
Nice. it took me a sec to realize what happened at the end but i got it after a little bit. i had to figure it out in my head though so yea lol Besides that well done he seems hilarious to me
# 4
Posted:
Dec 10 2010, 03:24 PM
RoflQu:
I was confused what was going on at the end. At first I thought he was in a field eating flowers but ate a disgusting one, but then it looked like he was in the air and was falling down? I'm confused as to what the action is going on there.
Ah, when I looked back at the page I had a feeling that it might be a bit confusing, but what I was going for was that he was floating on the breeze to Void city, eating a flower, when a thorn poked him and made him bleed a little, that being the reason why he was freaking out so much. I was trying to give an example of just how physically and personality wise he wasn't ready for the city, but I can totally see how that could have been lost in the translation.Quote
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# 3
Posted:
Dec 10 2010, 09:20 AM
Hey, good to see you up and in the site.
Your art is very nice, specifically in your line quality. I liked your gray usage here, too. I think you need a little bit of work on the hands and posing in some spots. Some of it is a little hard to read (the flexing Will in panel 3 of page 1 for example). I thought you could have handled some of it a little better, but you'll have plenty of time to do that in battles.
I was confused what was going on at the end. At first I thought he was in a field eating flowers but ate a disgusting one, but then it looked like he was in the air and was falling down? I'm confused as to what the action is going on there.
This character looks like he has a lot of potential, so I hope to see you use it. Congrats.
Your art is very nice, specifically in your line quality. I liked your gray usage here, too. I think you need a little bit of work on the hands and posing in some spots. Some of it is a little hard to read (the flexing Will in panel 3 of page 1 for example). I thought you could have handled some of it a little better, but you'll have plenty of time to do that in battles.
I was confused what was going on at the end. At first I thought he was in a field eating flowers but ate a disgusting one, but then it looked like he was in the air and was falling down? I'm confused as to what the action is going on there.
This character looks like he has a lot of potential, so I hope to see you use it. Congrats.
# 2
Posted:
Dec 9 2010, 09:38 PM
git dem battles started!
# 1
Posted:
Dec 9 2010, 06:38 PM
I'm so happy he's finally up!
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