Invitational Tournament 2010: Semifinals / Madelyn Powell vs. Ivan Reinhardt

Invitational Tournament 2010: Semifinals — Madelyn Powell vs. Ivan Reinhardt

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Shojin
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# 13   Posted: Sep 18 2010, 10:23 PM
@ Cherubas: I do my best. :D

@ SailorLonestar: Thanks for the crits cousin, I'll definitely take your suggestions to heart.

@ JimValid: Haha, yes he tends to see everything as fun and games at this point.  I definitely need to break out and try new camera angles, it's one of my weakpoints.

@ angieness: I'm glad you liked the mood of the comics.  I will definitely try to put more effort into the backgrounds, I've been neglecting them and I apologize for that.

@ Dan: I had original planned to do this all in color, hence the strange emptiness of the last page.  I was reserving it to do at least that page is full out color rendering.  But I lost time and didn't get to it.  I'll definitely try to be more careful of the word bubbles, I know they look sporadic right now. And yes, background, I'll get to that too. XD

Thanks for all the votes and critiques.  I greatly appreciate any and all feedback. :D

beardedMenace
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# 12   Posted: Sep 18 2010, 01:17 PM
Bah man, the zombie circus was sooo close!  Oh well, Clown Madelyn was an acceptable alternative, tho it lacked the more finished look of the rest of the comic.  Ivan is building quite a troupe, isn't he?
Be aware of your bubbles, I noticed at the bottom of page 3, you had to kinda jam the bubble in there.  And a little more background, but hey, I'm in that same boat.

Nice work!

Angie
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# 11   Posted: Sep 14 2010, 06:32 PM
Shojin-very cute story! I really like how lighthearted and sweet your comics come across. I would like to see you eventually incorporate some toning into the backgrounds. You do a good enough job with it on the characters so I'd like to see you give the backgrounds the same kind of attention.

JimValid
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# 10   Posted: Sep 14 2010, 01:25 AM
Xin:
This is disappointing :(

ShojinTakaru:
Short, sweet and entertaining! I really like the way you project Ivan's naievety in your storylines; it makes for some amusing observational humour of the way the world works around him. Visually, this time around is a lot more detailed, and i like it a lot. I feel like your 'camera angles' can get a bit samey at times, so feel free to really switch it up, but otherwise it's very nice and you've shown a consistent level of quality. Well done!

ThreeFatesAngel
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# 9   Posted: Sep 13 2010, 09:23 PM
Xin!  I wanted to see your pretty arts. T^T

Shojin: Hooray for Starbucks!  Too bad it wasn't closer though. XD Quick, simple, fun!  I like how it was easy to read and all the panels flow into the next logically/intuitively, and the camera angles weren't confusing but still moved.  (though the little one on page 5 was a little weird)  People didn't feel stiff or awkward which is definitely good.

Just some small stuff I want to point out: page 2,  madelyn could use some "BAM! ENTRANCE!" (though I think everyone should make an awesome entrance complete with Indianna Jones music). It would help the story to project some more (er I don't know the term) ups & downs/tension.  It was going there with the "OH NOES" silhouette of the zombie, but not quite all the way because it was too white.  page 3, maybe some speed lines for yoink.  Though I know you were short on time, more background/filler helps.  Sometimes the "floaty-ness" of the people was strange.  Hmm, like bottom of page 4 needed something in the white space.  Yea, that's it mostly, balance the white space.

Cherubas
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# 8   Posted: Sep 13 2010, 07:02 AM
Well done, my friend. That's some dedication.

Shojin
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# 7   Posted: Sep 12 2010, 10:58 PM
Finally uploaded, ran down to a starbucks and uploaded.

Shojin
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# 6   Posted: Sep 12 2010, 10:13 PM
Gods my internet isn't even stable enough to upload or to access e-mail.  Damnit.

Shojin
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# 5   Posted: Sep 12 2010, 09:53 PM
Note: I'm having trouble uploading because my internet connection isn't very reliable.  I'm sending Angie my work in case it isn't going to work on my end.

William_Duel
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# 4   Posted: Sep 8 2010, 04:18 PM
Don't fuck up.

ShouldaCouldaCola
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# 3   Posted: Sep 6 2010, 11:27 PM
HERE WE GOOOO!

Angie
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# 2   Posted: Sep 6 2010, 07:03 PM
good luck guys! Do something awesome!

beardedMenace
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# 1   Posted: Sep 6 2010, 04:05 PM
Oh snap.  Zombie Circus time!

GL you two!

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Type: Tournament Match
Drawing Time: 1 week
Ended: Sep 19th, 2010
Votes Cast: 24
Page Views: 1094
Winner: Shojin
 

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