TheOneDarkKnight just gave one of the most impressive comic rounds I have ever seen.
You have raised the bar out of sight.
ROBOT RIOT: MURDER QUEENS / Pandora vs. Shrapnel Girl vs. Swallow
Critiques & Comments
# 44
Posted:
Dec 16 2010, 07:20 PM
# 43
Posted:
Dec 12 2010, 11:18 PM
LOVE YOU BOYZ thanks for the fun time aw yea
thanks for the constructive comments! hit me with more if ya can.
thanks for the constructive comments! hit me with more if ya can.
# 42
Posted:
Dec 10 2010, 09:07 AM
TheOneDarkKnight: Wow, color me impressed.
The color job on this fight is great. A slight messy, but I understand you were under serious time for this. I like your gradients usage, it worked out very well here. I liked what you did, it's a lot stronger than your last fight.
If there's one thing I think that brings this down for me, it's your line quality. It's very sketchy and incomplete feeling in a lot of spots. Once again, I can understand the time issue here, but whenever you begin work on your comic, I would recommend that you slow it down a bit and make your line art cleaner.
I think you need to work on your sitting poses and your mouths a bit. In particular, I thought Shrapnel Girl's mouth was very odd looking at some spots, with the lips stopping and the mouth continuing a bit longer. It felt like you didn't weren't very flexible with those lips.
Your backgrounds were real fantastic here. A lot of awesome far back up shots made for a real professional look to your comic. Not a lot of people would devote the time toward that, it's commendable.
I loved your story. It was a very original piece and something that I don't think has been used since Culmination (if we can think that the users who participated in it even worked on so well as you did.) The entire thing worked out very well and it was a very impressive piece of prose.
You really did a marvelous job here. You honestly took this fight concept and really made a good story out of it. I think you definitely deserve all the praise in the world for this fight, because it really showed a lot of progress for you compared to your last fight on the site. This was worth the wait for sure and you didn't disappoint. Congratulations, you deserve it.
4:00am: This was a really high-concept idea.
The story was hard to follow, I can only assume some things from it. However, the idea of Suit in a biker gang with (?) Shrapnel Girl was very cool imagery.
You need to work on your anatomy. Your eyes are very dead looking and I feel like they just stare off into space, without having any real focus. You also don't devote enough space to people's heads. They're very short and hardly any room for the brain. This is readily apparent on page 8.
Your bodies also all feel samey, with everyone being this very skinny person with the same proportions, but perhaps shorter or taller. Going for such a realistic style as yours (at least your people) is is a really tough gig, and people will be that much more critical of it, but it's respectable to try for that too. I would definitely break out the sketchbook and get some more practice in though, because your people are holding back a lot of what you do.
The colors were very nice when you could afford to use them. I like the orange purple desert landscape, it was very strong imagery and it really fits with your style, but I wasn't a fan of the usage of tones in the colors. I think especially with your style which already incorporates a significant amount of blacks, the tones are kind of competing with the colors for attention and it kind of gets muddy looking.
It really is too bad you didn't finish this as you wanted. However, looking at all these intense images, we're real lucky to have you on the site because you have a lot of very cool inventive ideas for how to take your stuff in ways it's never gone. I really hope to see you doing stuff soon, whether on here or working on something else.
Craqued: I was real glad to see this comic.
The colors on the first page are gorgeous and I'm kind of disappointed you didn't keep on going through with that, because we don't normally see color work from you, and with colors like these, that's a shame. However, your tones, grays, and inks are brilliant as usual, so the disappointment is subdued.
I think it was neat to read a story with the same cast of characters in a different setting and as different players, since I know in the past you used Shrapnel Girl in a fight, so this was a cool little change of pace to have her as the villain.
The idea used, such as the brain and spine of Pandora being stolen was a very fresh idea. The ending is a funny/cute/horrible mix and I like how you wrapped everything up for everyone essentially. I enjoyed your story a lot.
Your people looked great and I loved your action in this comic. The chase scene was terrific, however I think your fighting panels became a little muddled and hard to read, but at the same time, it wasn't hindering the scene, either.
I don't normally get to see your work off-site (Not that I don't know where to look, but I never remember to do it on a basis less than every three months or so.) So it's a real treat to see you doing another comic on here. Whether you hop on back in a few months or keep rolling with your off-site activities, I'm always happy to see whatever you'll do. Good job.
The color job on this fight is great. A slight messy, but I understand you were under serious time for this. I like your gradients usage, it worked out very well here. I liked what you did, it's a lot stronger than your last fight.
If there's one thing I think that brings this down for me, it's your line quality. It's very sketchy and incomplete feeling in a lot of spots. Once again, I can understand the time issue here, but whenever you begin work on your comic, I would recommend that you slow it down a bit and make your line art cleaner.
I think you need to work on your sitting poses and your mouths a bit. In particular, I thought Shrapnel Girl's mouth was very odd looking at some spots, with the lips stopping and the mouth continuing a bit longer. It felt like you didn't weren't very flexible with those lips.
Your backgrounds were real fantastic here. A lot of awesome far back up shots made for a real professional look to your comic. Not a lot of people would devote the time toward that, it's commendable.
I loved your story. It was a very original piece and something that I don't think has been used since Culmination (if we can think that the users who participated in it even worked on so well as you did.) The entire thing worked out very well and it was a very impressive piece of prose.
You really did a marvelous job here. You honestly took this fight concept and really made a good story out of it. I think you definitely deserve all the praise in the world for this fight, because it really showed a lot of progress for you compared to your last fight on the site. This was worth the wait for sure and you didn't disappoint. Congratulations, you deserve it.
4:00am: This was a really high-concept idea.
The story was hard to follow, I can only assume some things from it. However, the idea of Suit in a biker gang with (?) Shrapnel Girl was very cool imagery.
You need to work on your anatomy. Your eyes are very dead looking and I feel like they just stare off into space, without having any real focus. You also don't devote enough space to people's heads. They're very short and hardly any room for the brain. This is readily apparent on page 8.
Your bodies also all feel samey, with everyone being this very skinny person with the same proportions, but perhaps shorter or taller. Going for such a realistic style as yours (at least your people) is is a really tough gig, and people will be that much more critical of it, but it's respectable to try for that too. I would definitely break out the sketchbook and get some more practice in though, because your people are holding back a lot of what you do.
The colors were very nice when you could afford to use them. I like the orange purple desert landscape, it was very strong imagery and it really fits with your style, but I wasn't a fan of the usage of tones in the colors. I think especially with your style which already incorporates a significant amount of blacks, the tones are kind of competing with the colors for attention and it kind of gets muddy looking.
It really is too bad you didn't finish this as you wanted. However, looking at all these intense images, we're real lucky to have you on the site because you have a lot of very cool inventive ideas for how to take your stuff in ways it's never gone. I really hope to see you doing stuff soon, whether on here or working on something else.
Craqued: I was real glad to see this comic.
The colors on the first page are gorgeous and I'm kind of disappointed you didn't keep on going through with that, because we don't normally see color work from you, and with colors like these, that's a shame. However, your tones, grays, and inks are brilliant as usual, so the disappointment is subdued.
I think it was neat to read a story with the same cast of characters in a different setting and as different players, since I know in the past you used Shrapnel Girl in a fight, so this was a cool little change of pace to have her as the villain.
The idea used, such as the brain and spine of Pandora being stolen was a very fresh idea. The ending is a funny/cute/horrible mix and I like how you wrapped everything up for everyone essentially. I enjoyed your story a lot.
Your people looked great and I loved your action in this comic. The chase scene was terrific, however I think your fighting panels became a little muddled and hard to read, but at the same time, it wasn't hindering the scene, either.
I don't normally get to see your work off-site (Not that I don't know where to look, but I never remember to do it on a basis less than every three months or so.) So it's a real treat to see you doing another comic on here. Whether you hop on back in a few months or keep rolling with your off-site activities, I'm always happy to see whatever you'll do. Good job.
# 41
Posted:
Dec 10 2010, 09:07 AM
Whoops, double post, too!
# 40
Posted:
Dec 10 2010, 06:37 AM
double post
# 39
Posted:
Dec 10 2010, 06:36 AM
All Are very COOL!
1darkKnight your piece really came through to me though. Not familiar with any of the characters. yours was the 1st I read. the story carried me completely. Clear story telling, NICELY drawn, cool story. reminds me of Heavy Metal mag stories COOLSOME!
CraQued was very Cool too, I didn't get 1 part. Not sure what she was doing on the roof. But the rest of the story Flowed.
Fight scene was good but didn't grab me like the 1st part and the crawling brain .. Trippy . but both closes worked.
4:00am The Cool expressive art work at the beginning had me thinking the piece was going one way and I was ready to go there but then I still couldn't tell what was up by page 4. then i picked up a few clues and finally got some of it by the end but i wasn't sure precisely what happened with that last explosion. A couple of SCHWEET images spotted through out but overall i needed some dialogue or something. the images weren't clear enough to tell the story alone... but maybe it's me.
1darkKnight your piece really came through to me though. Not familiar with any of the characters. yours was the 1st I read. the story carried me completely. Clear story telling, NICELY drawn, cool story. reminds me of Heavy Metal mag stories COOLSOME!
CraQued was very Cool too, I didn't get 1 part. Not sure what she was doing on the roof. But the rest of the story Flowed.
Fight scene was good but didn't grab me like the 1st part and the crawling brain .. Trippy . but both closes worked.
4:00am The Cool expressive art work at the beginning had me thinking the piece was going one way and I was ready to go there but then I still couldn't tell what was up by page 4. then i picked up a few clues and finally got some of it by the end but i wasn't sure precisely what happened with that last explosion. A couple of SCHWEET images spotted through out but overall i needed some dialogue or something. the images weren't clear enough to tell the story alone... but maybe it's me.
# 38
Posted:
Dec 9 2010, 08:34 PM
Coatl: How the fuck did this battle become so badass?
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# 37
Posted:
Dec 9 2010, 04:39 PM
How the fuck did this battle become so badass?
# 36
Posted:
Dec 8 2010, 09:13 PM
very nice!! I enjoyed reading all of them. 4am, the color at the beginning was pretty good, i wish there was some text because i got kinda confused at some points and it could have cleared it up some. Nice pacing though. Todk, i really liked the pacing and how you introduced that it was a story being told by Pandora but i feel that the build up was just a tad long and lost some momentum, very nice ending, the last image is really clever. Craqued, I like the way you organized each of your pages. The beginning conversation between Pandora and Swallow didn't seem natural to me and the fight scene was a little hard to get through. Very interesting storyline. Nicely down all of you =]
# 35
Posted:
Dec 8 2010, 09:05 PM
The One Dark Knight, that has to be one of the better comics I've read in a while. My brain was exploding the entire time.
# 34
Posted:
Dec 8 2010, 04:44 PM
i think they are all great. and im soooo happy im not the only one who has a girl character in void..back in the day it was basically a sausage factory around here. and here are such cool characters too, good job every one.
# 33
Posted:
Dec 8 2010, 01:36 PM
I just have to add I love that tiny tiny subplot with Molly Yan. Like it's just there and it's cool.
# 32
Posted:
Dec 8 2010, 01:16 PM
TODK, Man, you are amazing and I am glad that you didn't let anyone down with this amazing comic. I was looking forward to it from the get go and loved it every moment.
You guys all did pretty good but TODK gets my vote, it simply blew me away.
You guys all did pretty good but TODK gets my vote, it simply blew me away.
# 31
Posted:
Dec 8 2010, 09:06 AM
One Dark Knight, that was absolutly amazing! everything was incredible.
# 30
Posted:
Dec 8 2010, 08:46 AM
I...I...I think I just peed myself. This was way too good....
# 29
Posted:
Dec 7 2010, 07:23 PM
Godspeed ladies and gentlemen
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# 28
Posted:
Dec 6 2010, 11:24 PM
Pandora is one of my favorite characters here on the site. I can't wait to see what wonderous new machines come out of her torn psudofleash this time
# 27
Posted:
Nov 26 2010, 01:39 PM
I am SO, SO excited for this! What little I've seen from both ODK and Craqued is just so beautiful I'm totally prepared to die of awesomeness
when it's finally put up.
Haven't seen any hype from 4:00Am yet, but I'm equally excited to see his too! Good luck to all of you.
when it's finally put up.
Haven't seen any hype from 4:00Am yet, but I'm equally excited to see his too! Good luck to all of you.
# 26
Posted:
Nov 26 2010, 12:37 PM
OH SO ITS LIKE THAT
nah thats cool with me, i can prob finish coloring mine by then too
nah thats cool with me, i can prob finish coloring mine by then too
# 25
Posted:
Nov 26 2010, 10:21 AM
Going to extend this so I can do it right and not rush coloring. I could have maybe 75% by tuesday but I don't think it would be the best I could do.
Hopefully that's ok with you guys, and sorry to everyone who's waiting for the comic to drop, but I'd like to have this 100% finished instead of just 75%
Hopefully that's ok with you guys, and sorry to everyone who's waiting for the comic to drop, but I'd like to have this 100% finished instead of just 75%
# 24
Posted:
Nov 25 2010, 11:41 AM
wasnt able to color mine cuz my tablet died BUT i kinda like mine anyway so eh. IM EXCITED TO SEE YOUR PARTS YOU GUYS!
# 23
Posted:
Nov 22 2010, 10:40 AM
There's a point in which you just settle into a deadline DEATH OR COMIX groove and I'm totally there
# 22
Posted:
Nov 21 2010, 03:35 PM
Im tired of waiting, hurry up guys!
# 21
Posted:
Nov 18 2010, 02:36 PM
shiiiiiiiiiiiiiiit, going to have to buckle down and go all out for the rest of this one
# 20
Posted:
Oct 25 2010, 02:22 AM
You guys got the death frenzy. I see it in your eyes.
# 19
Posted:
Oct 4 2010, 03:09 PM
there will be much decapitation
# 18
Posted:
Oct 4 2010, 12:59 PM
The One Dark Knight: Aaaand I'm starting on this
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The One Dark Knight: Aaaand I'm starting on this
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Awesome i only have 2.5 pages
# 17
Posted:
Oct 3 2010, 03:28 PM
Aaaand I'm starting on this
# 16
Posted:
Sep 23 2010, 01:55 PM
Oh you
# 15
Posted:
Sep 23 2010, 01:50 PM
69
# 14
Posted:
Sep 23 2010, 04:50 AM
Threesome XD GL HF
# 13
Posted:
Sep 11 2010, 02:24 PM
hahaha I KNOW RIGHT!?!!?
# 12
Posted:
Sep 11 2010, 09:13 AM
OH MAN 81 DAYS LEFT CANT WAIT
# 11
Posted:
Sep 2 2010, 02:50 PM
Hotness
# 10
Posted:
Sep 2 2010, 12:53 PM
It's not a deathmatch it's a robot riot murder orgy
# 9
Posted:
Sep 2 2010, 06:56 AM
Wait is this a giant deathmatch??
# 8
Posted:
Sep 2 2010, 06:17 AM
Oh shit, oh shit, OH SHIIT
# 7
Posted:
Sep 1 2010, 10:41 PM
get ready to DIE
# 6
Posted:
Sep 1 2010, 08:48 PM
So much excitement, also a big huge deadline!
# 5
Posted:
Aug 31 2010, 08:10 AM
DEAR ME.
# 4
Posted:
Aug 31 2010, 08:04 AM
LOL yeah right
# 3
Posted:
Aug 31 2010, 07:59 AM
Deathballlll
# 2
Posted:
Aug 30 2010, 09:26 PM
Hmm.
# 1
Posted:
Aug 30 2010, 09:17 PM
yesssssssss
Regular Match
Drawing Time:
1 week + 1
Ended:
Dec 14th, 2010
Votes Cast:
37
Page Views:
3576
Winner:
The One Dark Knight
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