Nibs, nice art! Most of the fully rendered stuff is pretty impressive.
I dig the personality you gave to your characters. Hyperion didn't feel really involved in this though.
The story was hard to follow but was logical at the same time. To me a typical clash of faith vs science.
That engine on panel two of final page is a real eyecatcher and looks so good it makes me step up my own game.
AJ, i liked the connection of how the opponents meet by accident. Very nicely linked.
Wish you did some more fully rendered stuff though. What i've seen from you before makes you a very dangerous opponent without the need of hype.
The comedic approach worked in this case, i'm glad it didn't became a slapstick. Most points go to entertainment for that "alien chat" convo.
Bravo!
Doc and Derp vs. Hyperion
Critiques & Comments
# 24
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Feb 14 2010, 01:21 PM
# 23
Posted:
Feb 14 2010, 06:39 AM
@Joshua(sorry-my-spacebar-is-broken)---All-but-the-last-three-panels-*were*-inked...I-just-didn't-get-to-erase-the-pencils-on-the-last-page...I-also-didn't-have-time-to-clean-my-scans,-as-I-was-barely-squeaking-in-under-the-deadline.
# 22
Posted:
Feb 10 2010, 04:56 PM
Nibbles, your penciling looks nice you had a good level of detail esp. on the most finished stuff. The dialogue of D n D was enjoyable, in general the characterizations were quite strong. It was a bit random and inks would rock but not bad at all for a plan C.
AJ man I just had a hard time getting into this because I was confused as to what was going on in spots..Obviously inks would help. In future scenarios try to make your pencils clearer in case you don't get to inks. Maybe just thicker panel borders would have helped, and more transitional panels such as the ending maybe show Hyperion catching D n D because the transition from the top to the bottom panel was too much of a mental leap for me I didn't get it at first. Maybe even putting "Minutes later, back on Hyperion's ship" in the box would have helped.
Like Will said the meeting idea was great, and the way you drew the ferrets was cool.
AJ man I just had a hard time getting into this because I was confused as to what was going on in spots..Obviously inks would help. In future scenarios try to make your pencils clearer in case you don't get to inks. Maybe just thicker panel borders would have helped, and more transitional panels such as the ending maybe show Hyperion catching D n D because the transition from the top to the bottom panel was too much of a mental leap for me I didn't get it at first. Maybe even putting "Minutes later, back on Hyperion's ship" in the box would have helped.
Like Will said the meeting idea was great, and the way you drew the ferrets was cool.
# 21
Posted:
Feb 8 2010, 08:45 PM
(William, yes, that was a manthing reference... I'm a huge dork too.)
# 20
Posted:
Feb 8 2010, 08:26 PM
Nibbles-I liked the traditionals, you should work more with them since this came out very nice. I think you maybe could have bumped the levels up a tad more in Photoshop just to give you some true darks, but even that's not totally necessary. The only thing I really noticed was a lot of your text is tiny and gets kind of squished together so it's very hard to read.
AJ-this was a step down from you but this kind of thing does happen when you're not accustomed to 1 week deadlines. (god knows I couldn't do one, I would die) But it's good practice nonetheless, lighting a fire under your ass builds character. I really enjoyed the story and loved the top of page 3. The only thing I can really suggest is to slow down and only take on as many pages as your can comfortably finish.
AJ-this was a step down from you but this kind of thing does happen when you're not accustomed to 1 week deadlines. (god knows I couldn't do one, I would die) But it's good practice nonetheless, lighting a fire under your ass builds character. I really enjoyed the story and loved the top of page 3. The only thing I can really suggest is to slow down and only take on as many pages as your can comfortably finish.
# 19
Posted:
Feb 8 2010, 06:31 PM
Haha Nibbles you are a credit to ferrets everywhere. The story was a lot of fun (was that a manthing reference? yeah I'm a dork...) and your art, though unfinished, shows the depth of talent that you have. I look forward to your next work.
Aj, this was not bad but it's too sketchy and gives an overall sense of being unfinished. Though nibbles had that feeling more towards the end, your entry needed a few more coats of paint (metaphorically speaking). Your story was funny though and the interaction that occurred was a pretty good idea.
Aj, this was not bad but it's too sketchy and gives an overall sense of being unfinished. Though nibbles had that feeling more towards the end, your entry needed a few more coats of paint (metaphorically speaking). Your story was funny though and the interaction that occurred was a pretty good idea.
# 18
Posted:
Feb 8 2010, 06:16 PM
If anyone is wondering why my battle is in traditional medium instead of digital when I spent my first day fixing my tablet--it's because this is plan C. Plan A was crap, and I scrapped it before I finished fixing my tablet on Monday. Plan B was epic, had a lot more characterization, and foreshadowing. It was also eight pages and since my daughter has apparently declared it cuddle week, I can't sit at my computer in peace. Also, my free time on Wed, and Thur was taken up by blood loss and passing out (still having complications from that miscarriage), so by Friday I needed a new plan, one that could be done from the safety of my bed. And this is it.
Thanks sixtem!
Thanks sixtem!
# 17
Posted:
Feb 8 2010, 05:20 PM
Nibbles - I really enjoyed your comic. I wasn't sure what to think about two animals who were the classic Pinky-and-the-Brain duality, but you pulled it off well. Funny comic and you involved your opponent in it well. It wasn't completely finished, but I felt that it didn't really detract from your comic.
AJ - I liked the story you had going, but everything was so rushed that the leaps between scenes made it hard to follow. Not much to say except that I hope your next comic is more finished.
AJ - I liked the story you had going, but everything was so rushed that the leaps between scenes made it hard to follow. Not much to say except that I hope your next comic is more finished.
# 16
Posted:
Feb 8 2010, 12:32 AM
Fixed. Probably.
# 15
Posted:
Feb 8 2010, 12:18 AM
Uploaded, but I must tell you--these pages, are plan C... and I tell you NOTHING has gone right this week.
# 14
Posted:
Feb 8 2010, 12:16 AM
your last page doesn't work Nibbles! Please try to reupload it!
# 13
Posted:
Feb 7 2010, 11:55 PM
Whoa finishing the upload now!Its done... -_-'
# 12
Posted:
Feb 7 2010, 11:42 PM
Herp derp. Can't wait to see this battle either!
# 11
Posted:
Feb 7 2010, 11:19 PM
Having to spend my last available time installing drivers...grrr...stupid comp...hurry the hell up...
# 10
Posted:
Feb 7 2010, 05:53 PM
Almost done.
# 9
Posted:
Feb 7 2010, 11:34 AM
Reminder for all of you uploading tonight, please read this in the event your upload fails before coming to the mods
http://entervoid.com/board/index.php?topic=10641.0
http://entervoid.com/board/index.php?topic=10641.0
# 8
Posted:
Feb 1 2010, 09:54 PM
MWA HAHAHAHA HAHAHAHA HAHA!!! IT LIVES! </mad scientist>
Twelve minutes to midnight here, I've lost almost a day in time for drawing, my thumb is bleeding and burned, and I've probably breathed more lead fumes than is healthy, but I have SUCCEEDED in restoring LIFE to my trusty tablet that has served me 10 years thus far. Perhaps it shall serve me ten more.
Twelve minutes to midnight here, I've lost almost a day in time for drawing, my thumb is bleeding and burned, and I've probably breathed more lead fumes than is healthy, but I have SUCCEEDED in restoring LIFE to my trusty tablet that has served me 10 years thus far. Perhaps it shall serve me ten more.
# 7
Posted:
Feb 1 2010, 08:42 PM
Repairing your own tablet? You have redefined hardcore.
Also, who needs DVDs? That's what the internet is for!
Also, who needs DVDs? That's what the internet is for!
# 6
Posted:
Feb 1 2010, 01:01 PM
Put Lita in front of "Planet Earth" or "Nova" or something, she'll thank you for it when she's older.
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Man, I grew up on Nova! I wholeheartedly agree with you, but I don't have any on DVD. They're on her Barnes and Noble wishlist.
Guess what else? I get to go to Radioshack today to pick up a soldering kit, solder, and some heat shrink tubes so I can fix my fukkin' wacom wire. I think I'll take pictures and make a tutorial out of it for the forums.
I knew the damn thing was going to bite the dust during this tourney but I figured it'd at least make it through the first match! Don't worry though, I'll have this thing fixed in a jiffy, and if not I'll draw this bitch with a mouse if I have to.
I guess once I have it fixed I won't have any excuse not to go right through the whole tourney though.
# 5
Posted:
Feb 1 2010, 12:14 PM
Put Lita in front of "Planet Earth" or "Nova" or something, she'll thank you for it when she's older.
Looking forward to this match!!
Looking forward to this match!!
# 4
Posted:
Feb 1 2010, 09:26 AM
Heather W.: Two more battles--I'll get Veteran. Seven more, and I'll get Old School this June. It's time I regained my Void Honor.
At first I didn't have a clue what to do with this guy--I mean c'mon, this character is a powerhouse and I've got ferrets! But I think I have something worked out. Hopefully everyone will like it.
Drawing will commence tomorrow--'Lita will probably be watching more movies than is healthy while I do this, but it's been too long since I've battled. For now, I'm going to bed.
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Yeah the same prob here bro, but i have an idea that might work eh eh eh...
something related to aliens from another planet lol.
see ya soon guys.
# 3
Posted:
Jan 31 2010, 10:24 PM
Two more battles--I'll get Veteran. Seven more, and I'll get Old School this June. It's time I regained my Void Honor.
At first I didn't have a clue what to do with this guy--I mean c'mon, this character is a powerhouse and I've got ferrets! But I think I have something worked out. Hopefully everyone will like it.
Drawing will commence tomorrow--'Lita will probably be watching more movies than is healthy while I do this, but it's been too long since I've battled. For now, I'm going to bed.
At first I didn't have a clue what to do with this guy--I mean c'mon, this character is a powerhouse and I've got ferrets! But I think I have something worked out. Hopefully everyone will like it.
Drawing will commence tomorrow--'Lita will probably be watching more movies than is healthy while I do this, but it's been too long since I've battled. For now, I'm going to bed.
# 2
Posted:
Jan 31 2010, 05:55 PM
I'm writing my script already. I think I know what I need to do.
# 1
Posted:
Jan 31 2010, 05:17 PM
This is really odd!!
Lookin forward to it
Lookin forward to it
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aj, the blue bic approach didn't grab me & just made everything feel that much more rushed. and give your panels gutters between them. scribbling just a line between things really makes the sloppiness stand out.