Thanks, glad you liked it!

haha nope, I can totally see it though. It's just some weird ass furry animal person

Is that yoda in the background on page 5 behind the speech bubble.. first panel...?

Thanks, I'm glad to have done the cutest thing you've seen on Void haha

Yeah, that crooked line you can thank my cat for, they kind of walked up and stepped on the ruler as I was making the line. By all means I should have fixed it in Photoshop but it slipped my mind until after I'd colored it and I was just like fuck it. The jagged edges in the inking are intentional, for the longest time my art has been so insanely round and smooth, I've been enjoying going with the total opposite and just making things sharper.

The first page remains as one of the cutest things I've ever seen on here...
 
Nice comic Angie, I think your colors look even better here. The blue worked out quite nicely in this. I suggest being more careful when making straight lines, like on page 6 the panel with the buildings, the "Gacy's" building has a certain structure that looks pretty crooked, especially when  in comparison to all the other lines on the panel. I would also like to see your linework be a bit more smoother; you have these sort of jagged edges around the outlines of the characters. Other than that I think this was awesome. I enjoyed the story, short and sweet

haha yeah that's a tough shot, I'm not surprised I got it wrong. But it never hurts to try since I learned from it. Glad you like the new inks, I've been experimenting with them and I like the more sharp/angular look they give. That and it's like 2-3 times as fast as my old "okay I need to draw this shit photorealistic" way.

As for what Julia got her, I can't remember who said this to me, Jack maybe? Think of it like the whisper in the end of Lost in Translation. YOU WILL NEVAR KNOW! I'm leaving it up to the audience hahaha

Gah! I swear I can type coherently, it's just I'm zoning out badly. Yikes, sorry about that.
what I mean here is that her top body seems a way bit smaller than the couch itself. I see it's a pretty big couch, and that dynamic angle is a bit of a challenge.

Haha oh man so many comments already. Forgive me if I come off as a broken record here.
I really don't have any real critiques besides what's been stated. I did observe the angle on the bottom right panel on the first page and it looked like Angie's top body was smaller than what it should be. Or maybe it's a huge couch, I'm not certain. The inks here I've really noticed a change with. They're much tighter and cleaner and you seem to be working with sharper angles too. Story wise, it was a pretty straight to the point sweet encounter of two young lesbins in love.
Great work to you Heather! Though I ponder what's in the bag Julia gave her, Heheheh

Thanks, I'll keep working on my perspective!

And yes, I would love to do more like this since I'm a huge fan of slice of life comics, I never got the chance to read Strangers in Paradise though. (although I always heard great things about it, since they've been rereleasing them in those small books it'd probably be worth hunting down) It may not go over as well on Void since there's still the mindset of "everyone must do action", but it's better to do what I enjoy than try to please the masses.

Great Job Angie as always… It’s always good to see you working on your backgrounds and your establishing shots. It keeps the reader in the know and constantly moving.

Watch your Birds eye view perspectives… Those are hard to do even when you aren’t eyeballing… as in Panel 5 page 4, and Page 5 panel 5. I think composition wise these could have been reworked.

Great feel though all around… Thanks for a real life piece… It was good to read, ever since strangers in paradise ended I’ve been unable to find a good character story.

Kotori-thanks! Glad you enjoyed it. It was just meant to be a simple slice of life cute comic so I'm glad that came across fine.

Alberto-awww well I'll eagerly anticipate seeing it later

jhalton-It's possible, they're both huge cities haha And yeah, I do use the structural lines when absolutely need be, but I have gotten bad about not doing them for more simple straight on shots. And good, glad the conversation was convincing haha I'd totally misread what you meant.

Oh, well I guess the NY macy's looks like the chicago macy's/marshall fields.

I do the same thing w/ perspective a lot too, but it's the idea that if you practice it the right way enough, when you eyeball it, it will be more convincing.

As for convincing, I didn't mean the convo was annoying because it was fake, i meant because it WAS convincing. I'm surprised at what I hear people saying over the phone while in public, I'm sure you hear enough for a lifetime of script material. especially at a MALL where a bunch of high schoolers hang out who like to broadcast their lives for everyone to hear, haha

Lame ass! MY COMMENT WASN'T POSTED. aww well I'll try again tomorrow.

Just to say here what I've told you on AIM... I adore this comic. I adore it because it is so very 'human'. There isn't massive plot, there isn't huge battles or dark mysteries. It is two people in a relationship and how they interact and what happens. I love it. It's a short and very funny look into an important moment for Angie, even if it isn't a big battle or so on. This was great fun to read just because it was so simple. <3

Thanks, yeah I'm pretty terrible at perspective. Honestly nowadays I just eyeball it since any time I use all the structural lines it ends up looking more off. Which isn't the right and proper way, but as I was taught by my structural drawing teacher, most the time if it looks right it most likely is right. And that was actually the New York Macy's I had to rely on references for it since the only Macy's around here is inside of actual malls. The interior of the Macy's was from photos I took of the Macy's and a store called Von Maur in my mall.

As for the conversation happening outside, I work in a Starbucks in a mall haha I hear every detail of people's lives when I'm at work either through people standing around and talking or talking on their cell phone. So for me, it's not unrealistic at all since I hear this kind of stuff constantly. That and Julia brought it up since it'd been on her mind and the fact that VDay was coming up and a couple just walked by kind of rubbing in that Angie isn't really all into public display of affection.

Cool, awesome coloring and background detail. I will say that while you got away with not using much perspective, when you DO use perspective, it stands out as being off. Try to use real perspective in the angled views, it should just take you a little more time to set up. You're already working with a lot of great detail.

Awesome shots of chicago macy's, did you draw that from inside the new mall across the street?

Storywise, I'm kind of annoyed that the girl was saying all that stuff on her cell phone while standing outside in public....come on people, do we really need to be that exhibitionistic?

Thanks Foo! Yeah, I don't think I've ever seen a blue eyed tiger plush haha

hey angie.. sorry i hadda leave right after you sent me the link, but aaaaaaaanyways.. now that ive read this.

i thought this was Great!... i cant even think of too much to nit pick about it.. i think youve taken all the notes people have given you very well.. so all i can do is say keep going with that. its seeming to do wonders for you.

the color tones and palettes are much improved here and i really liked the pacing and text.

if anything i thought the tiger could have been a liiiittle more generic instead of looking like they just happened to have a knock off angie doll heh.. but it was still amazingly cute i kinda wish i coulda seen what julia got her, though i realize that wasnt the important part of the story it woulda been a nice touch.

loved it GG... keep it comin.

Red-much love <3

Jesse-glad to hear it! Dialogue is something I've been trying to iron out a lot lately so I'm glad it sounded natural to you.

Fantastic dialogue! It feels really natural and pretty much makes this piece. Your characters are exquisitely crafted, and I think that might be your strongest point.

This was just too cute, a short and fun read <3  really nice job!!

Thanks! That was partly because I was just trying to do a really quick and fun comic. When I saw I was reaching the 10 page mark I was like oh shit I need to find a way to end this.

very awesome sis! abrupt ending though, leaving  me wanting more...which is  a compliment i guess too.

J.Vandermeer-thanks dude! It means a lot to hear someone emotionally effected by one of my comics, means I did my job right.

RTV-yeah I could see that problem with the phone panels, probably 1 more panel would have helped. I'm trying to work on depth, in the past I know I've been really bad about not really doing much with linewidths and such in backgrounds so I'm trying to fix that. haha glad you liked Julia and the comic, you already know killer Angie is coming up soon.

Nice light hearted comic that stopped right when i got into it.
Sweet colours!

Maybe it's a personal taste and i've got a slight issue with the flow. On page three panel two the phone rings, somehow that made my eyes shift back and forth to the previous panel cuz she lifts her head up first and then the phone rings. I think the "ring" could be placed in the first panel and let the second panel be her reaction.

At the bottom of that same page i really LOVE the contrast between the location of the two (warm/cold)
On the fifth page i dig the shots you picked for the last three panels, very cinematic. That middle panel has an awesome angle, but try push it a bit by placing objects or lines in the panel for more depth.
More snow would really strenghten some of the emotional scenes, like when she's messing with Angie at the end.

Overall the pacing and visual storytelling are quite enjoyable.
Cute. However, i can't wait for the bloodthirsty killer!

P.S.
The way you drew Angie's girlfriend in lingerie is hot. I would absolutely do her if i had a comic version of myself.

OH SWEET JESUS.
You've gone and made me all emotional, Angie. I'd love to offer some constructive feedback, but I think I'd just end up spluttering about how much my brain couldn't help but relate.
A very HUMAN submission, all in all.

Thanks! Be sure to let me know what you think after you've read it

I must admit the improvement in your work; And it's not the colors (always good there.) I didn't read it yet, I'll do that when my little ones are not hovering, but I love the pacing, attention to detail, etc.

Very nice.

Only a modest 10, 13 with all the bonus goodies.

how many pages is it? o.o

All done and uploaded, but you guys are gonna have to wait until Valentine's Day to read it!

Oh no, I think I'm coming down with something. I must be strong. Think it'll be okay since I'm almost done inking and have like 31 days.

Sweet...
Guaranteed pussy.

well maybe he'll show up in a photo on a wall or in a crowd, I already have the script written so we shall see.

im hoping for a foo cameo..... but i wont hold it against you either way ;P

Lesbians is the best

Psst SPOILER:

Turns out that the sister was not really a lesbian, though the main lesbian ended up in a relationship with the sister of the guy who faked his death thirteen years ago to frame his best friend's cousin for a crime he did not commit.  

we shall see haha

Looks like this will be a box office success in no time.

I sense the glitter!

well there was some issues with the casting and there were some production delays but things are looking up.

The comic, the Game.

I read the novel, I hope the film is as good!!

Well, I wasn't going to give myself a deadline on this but I feel like I'll work faster if I do. I won't promise it'll be up on Valentine's Day, but with that being the theme of the comic, yeah. The title was a joke I had in the script but people liked it so there you have it haha I just really wanted to do a quick fun comic before I hopped into another battle since work slaughtered me this holiday season and boy do I need to just have fun drawing.