I think you should cut back on the watercolors for a while as they're getting a bit too light here. You need some darker tones with the colors. As for the line art, your faces are still pretty wonky on the 3/4th views, page 3 in that thumbnail there, his left eye is sagging there, and remember, if somebody is talking, their chin moves around as well. Other than that, the story was pretty good, although I would of like to seen this lengthened a bit, mainly at the beginning to space out the exposition.

Other than that, work on those things and keep it up.

Not bad... Try to tighten up your dialogue.... and try to be consistant with your background.. some were just lazy like panel 1&2 page 4. Loved the last page.

I feel real bad about the Default. But I'll have to get back to you on the time for the rematch.  I wanna make sure we do it to where you and I have the time.

Si, la subí  :3
Thanks William Duel, I am experimenting with watercolors. For this battle did not have much time to color and the background.
Anthony, Thanks! I will do better next time!!!
Again, sorry for my default. I look forward to a rematch, we can make it now or in February or March, whenever you want!

Wow, dude. I love the roll you gave Casimir in the story. And adding Gabriel was really awesome. It's not hard to created a positive influence in a story without it having to get to sappy. Great job, homie. I love it. And that last page rocked my day!!!

Oh I think this was a very strong outing for you betito.  I liked the story in its simplicity and while there's no sense of impending danger or anything like that, it's like there's a plan in store for Martin.  I like that.  On page 4 though I feel that there are two instances of the faces not quite resting well on the character's faces, a small flaw.  And I feel you're trying hard on the background and your effort shows impressively on the last page.  Your coloring is not bad but I have to say that I'm not a fan of your subdued color choices.  Your coloring style is too light overall, at least in my eyes.  It lends a sort of monotony to the story telling, not in a bad way but just that it would work well with really slice of life stories.  

bien betito la subiste