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LOL I love Fox!

tough break, wend.

fox, you're losing a lot of prime real estate on your pages to just big ugly negative blank space & there's really no call for it. while you're taking angles into effect, it seems like you're neglecting scale & zoom to their fullest effect.  fill out those spaces by showing more action or give us some backgrounds so we can get a point of reference building when shit starts to get jumpy. as is, they feel a bit halfassed because you're kind of wimping out on showing us more of the world or filling the page with it. beyond that, it was hard to tell who exactly i was looking at from time to time. work on some variation between the characters. and again, even if you're not using comic sans, it's something that's close enough to look just as awful, like some mac variant or something. look for some alternatives before your next battle. seriously. they really detract from the overall look of the page. and the big blocky balloons are just as bad. try the pen tool or something to get more flow & feeling into them.

Artwise, you need a lot more contrast, the characters aren't really solid because at times they don't really havea complete background, kind of like they are in some kind of fog. The backgrounds fade out into the fog as well. I suggest you actually complete the characters and backgorunds rather than fade them out. Maybe try to ink them. The characters did look very similar to each other. Keep working on anatomy and perspective.

storywise, it was kind of hard to follow because of the drawing. I wasn't a huge fan of the one-liners but that's just personal preference.

Wend, I'm glad you were able to finish the other battle, but I think it's clear you need to focus on one battle at a time from now on. Know your limits, and don't let this happen again. And Cold, I think fox wants critiques/opinions on his comic along with the comments.


Fox: Not bad, Jake hit the nail on the head with the facial anatomy, it was very inconsistent and I could not tell who was who aside from a name being thrown around here and there during the fight scene. The text wasn't bad to me, but you should experiment with some other fonts, check what the guys at Zuda use, PM them if you can. The story was kinda meh up until the end, I liked how it was all a dream, but overall it wasn't enough to get my attention.

You seriously need to ink more often as your pencils are weaksauce, too much negative space going on here, even it out with some blacks or something. Overall it was pretty good, but I know you can do better than this.

you wanted comments!!

Fairly good composition as far as angle changes, though the lack of a range of value or any backgrounds really hurt the total experience.  Fonts are not much of a problem, there's a shitload available for free, get some cool ones and use em.  I'd recommend you study up on facial structures, taking special care to notice the different planes and angles, this will keep faces from looking too similar.

I really didn't care for the story at all.  I can't stand this Twilight fad- vampires live for hundreds and thousands of years and feast on human flesh- and fall in love with TEENAGERS?!  Plus the "werewolves" are just Calvin Klein models who turn into big wolves.

it's not comic sans but thanks

Fox24, Glad you uploaded. I was confused through-out the entire comic. At certain points it was like I was watching an anime where everyone looked the same. I imagine it could be the lack of contrast and details in all the pages. Your pages also seem like they are warped and made to fit to the point where everything became distorted. Your anatomy needs a lot of work. Pay attention to the placement of features of the face and make exaggerate more on things like teeth, etc. I'd like to see more details as well. (folds in clothing, backgrounds, etc.

Now, something you'll hear from many people... YOUR FONT AND WORD BUBBLES. www.blambot.com Never use comic sans, prease.
Good work either way. I apologize if nothing I just said makes sense or doesn't seem correct, I'm hella tired. Either way, good job.

As for you, Wend... naughty naughty.

eh I figured Xia could be a common character since P doesn't have many or any friends in void, so why not

Aww, thanks for adding Xia in your comic, Fox. Wasn't expecting the cameo there .

I at least wanted some comments on the work

yea yea yea, i was hoping to keep the streak alive, now no one will vote on my battle

Fox got the W!!!!!!!!!!

hey on page two I put 5 hours later between panels 2 and the center but for some reason it won't upload the correction so forgive me

Uploaded

I was going to upload this weekend, but I'll just wait till monday

GO FOX GO