Gibson V vs. Uchu Senshi Kirin

Gibson V vs. Uchu Senshi Kirin

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Phill
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# 35   Posted: Dec 8 2009, 09:12 AM
I'm sorry to hear that you didn't want to show anything, Jet. Try to give us a comic really soon though as you can really kick ass with it.


Jackster: FUCK YOU! You're awesome! I disagree with the previous statement as to the first part being boring as it had very good character development and shows a lot in your attention to detail in those sort of things. In fact, I really enjoyed the story all around and I thought it had a lot of heart to it. What bugs me is the style of the characters, mainly their faces. They seem way too cartoonish to be taken seriously granted you had a little bit of humor in this battle, I really think you should of put in a bit more of a realistic style in this comic (but keep some of the cartoony stuff) as I think it would set the tone of the story a bit better. Also I didn't like the last 3 panels of page 4, it took me a minute to realize that I read it backwards.

One of your best entries to date man. I want to see you do more in the future or shoot for Zuda.

michaelharris
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# 34   Posted: Dec 7 2009, 06:14 PM
The first time I read this I got three pages in and and fell asleep. The first part just bored me to tears. Not because it's not action, but because it is a) speaking about a situation that I never read, nor have a link to and b) just seems kinda dull in general. I would take a look at how comic artist Eduardo Risso(Rizzo?) anyway the guy who does "Hundred Bullets" does conversations. You do draw a lot of similar panels and it just goes real slow.

The second time I read it, it got better. I liked how the characters feel like real people having a conversation. I honestly had no idea they were sentai until the middle of the story. I am a fan of the rock/battle genre, I dunno what its called but stuff like Megas XLR, metalocolypse, brutal legend and stuff like that, so the end parts made me happy.  In the end I enjoyed the story, I would just suggest you find a way to make the beginning a little more enticing.

Artwise I didn't have any real problems, I am glad someone mentioned Lapham and Jeff Smith, this reminded me of them. The anatomy didn't bother me, I didn't notice it as I read the story but since everyone's said it, you may want to give it some thought. The tone/borrowed background/ speed lines all increased the "cheese factor" for me so I enjoyed them.

Mister Kent
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# 33   Posted: Dec 7 2009, 05:48 PM
Jack - I think the speed lines weren't too much of a problem for me - they didn't stand out to me as much as the background on page 9. The stroy was cute, and really picked up when the giant slug monster showed up. Good luck on your next battle!

Jetaime - I miss your arts :D

alberto311
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# 32   Posted: Dec 7 2009, 11:17 AM
Wow... I thought the story and art were quite entertaining.... I enjoyed it for what it was and wasn't bothered with the minute inconsistencies... much like some of my favorites Jeff Smith, David Lapham... Terry Moore... which at times they too tend to slight changes to their art then go back to a more solid style.... damn I dug the anatomy too... i thought they fit your style very well... oh well it's not easy to please everyone.

Keep on Drawing bruddah! Can't wait to see more.

Craqued
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# 31   Posted: Dec 7 2009, 10:13 AM
d'aw cute little Radiotard. I'm feelin' same as Dave but I think you got something there with those speedlines, they were done fairly well. The anatomy on the people kinda killed it for me. All the same though, keep on drawiiiin.

King_Pong
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# 30   Posted: Dec 6 2009, 02:36 PM
I'm going to have to disagree with Zsa.  I didn't really think this comic had anything going for it.  

Your linework was crude, and there are various problems with your toning.  The overall effect is pretty lifeless.  
Keep in mind when you're doing half tones that will be displayed on a computer, that the low resolving power of computer screens means that you can't get way using really fine tones without them forming annoying patterns.  It's best to use rather coarse tones, and (IMO) to stick to using them for lighter grays.
I also found the clashing of your line work with computer pasted action lines and other tones to be pretty distracting.  They just don't work together coherently and it looks pasted together, because it is pasted together.

You also had issues with consistency, anatomy, perspective, and even just keeping things in scale.

The story was ok, but it wasn't really that interesting or anything new either.

You've done much better before, but you just weren't pulling it off this time.

William_Duel
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# 29   Posted: Dec 6 2009, 01:06 PM
Eeh, sorry Jackster I am not a big fan of this story.  The meeting was sort of...mundane.  I have to disagree with zsa in saying that I did not like your way of drawing Kirin, it's rather awkward.  You're great at expressions and Gibson's characterization works well but not so much with Kirin.  I just don't feel that these stories really work out for you.  There's a lack of 'oomph' I feel, as vague as that might sound.  But you can do sentai style action well I think and in terms of quality, I don't think you lose anything in that regard.  You're definitely a strong contender.  It would be great to see more comics from you.  

Jetaime, the same from you, I would love to see more comics from you.  I've enjoyed what I've seen thus far from you.

Aluísio C. Santos
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# 28   Posted: Dec 6 2009, 04:09 AM
That was really incredible Jackster!
Your storytelling is perfect, so I won't talk about that now. At first, when I saw the girl I thought that the characterization of her in your style was rather strange but the more panels I saw the more I thought it was perfectly converted to your style, very neat!
A few problems popped though, being one anatomy on her body, specially when transformed, which she seemed to have the same body type, or then manly body type, except with boobs. And that happens to all panels with them transformed.
The other problem is just a nitpick, since I play guitar too and blabla, which is the bass guitar's arm to be too short, or at least you made it the same size of the electric guitar's arm. On this one as I said, pure nitpicking haha.

Very cool, it's a shame Jetaime didn't upload but you definately made up to him, and gave us a rock solid 20 pages!
Amazing!

(Pi)
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# 27   Posted: Dec 6 2009, 02:08 AM
Jack, you must really love sentai, huh? I keep reading your sentai battles and i feel like this should be a series already. i think you might be rushing things a bit though, there's a lot of places where you're inconsistent or just plain sloppy. Uchu's face in particular seemed to be difficult for you, especially pages 3 and 5. Also, it feels like you're always drawing everybody with massive ears. Maybe it's just in this comic, but I feel like I noticed it in your other sentai stuff as well. Anyhow, I think it might be that you're a little too loose for your own good. Tighten things up a bit, and you'll be good to go.

Angie
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# 26   Posted: Dec 5 2009, 10:51 PM
okay, then since Jetaime said no to canceling, Jackster's side is going up.

Jetaime
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# 25   Posted: Dec 5 2009, 10:43 PM
thanks for the consideration, though.

Jetaime
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# 24   Posted: Dec 5 2009, 10:41 PM
nah, put up jackster's side.

Angie
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# 23   Posted: Dec 5 2009, 10:13 PM
just let me know what you both wanna do

Jackster
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# 22   Posted: Dec 5 2009, 10:10 PM
If you want, we can always cancel the battle.

Jetaime
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# 21   Posted: Dec 5 2009, 09:58 PM
yeah, i screwed up.

Angie
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# 20   Posted: Dec 5 2009, 09:46 PM
you're defaulting? D:

Jetaime
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# 19   Posted: Dec 5 2009, 09:01 PM
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this is like round 1 of KOM all over again, except this time i have nothing worth showing.

there's no need to wait for me.

jho
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# 18   Posted: Dec 5 2009, 04:38 AM
*popcorn*

Jackster
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# 17   Posted: Nov 29 2009, 06:58 PM
As much as I appreciate Jet for the extension, I'm just going to go ahead and submit what I have. I really dislike the story I created in my part and I don't want to work on it anymore as a result.

So I'm rooting for Jetaime.

Jetaime
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# 16   Posted: Nov 27 2009, 11:38 PM
ah, it worked.

my apology still stands, though, because i'm going to spend a week on something i should've spent 4 weeks on.

E.W. Schneider
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# 15   Posted: Nov 27 2009, 10:54 PM
You can extend this battle, Jetaime.

Jetaime
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# 14   Posted: Nov 27 2009, 10:00 PM
i'm REALLY sorry guys. i just realized we can't get extensions for special events.

i'll upload the finished comic as soon as i can.

Jackster, i'm sorry.

Darius Corry
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# 13   Posted: Nov 22 2009, 10:42 AM
You've been HYPED!

ronin-soul
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# 12   Posted: Nov 21 2009, 03:36 PM
this = excite.

amazingdavid
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441 comments
# 11   Posted: Nov 3 2009, 08:43 AM
Jet...kill that sucka

JoshuaEliGilley
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# 10   Posted: Nov 2 2009, 09:58 AM
SENTAI FTW

Jackster
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# 9   Posted: Oct 31 2009, 10:37 PM
Is it?

NeoIcarus
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115 comments
# 8   Posted: Oct 31 2009, 10:05 PM
Is it my birthday?

Corny
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# 7   Posted: Oct 31 2009, 06:31 PM
OH MY GOD YES

William_Duel
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# 6   Posted: Oct 31 2009, 09:33 AM
I was sad cuz I thought this wasnt gonna happen, but I'm psyched now.

Angie
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1937 comments
# 5   Posted: Oct 31 2009, 09:18 AM
Sweeeet :D can't wait for this

Darius Corry
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426 comments
# 4   Posted: Oct 31 2009, 09:03 AM
YES!

Kon
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# 3   Posted: Oct 31 2009, 08:32 AM
I WANT THIS

E.W. Schneider
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# 2   Posted: Oct 31 2009, 01:21 AM
Perfect. It's all falling into place.

Mister Kent
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# 1   Posted: Oct 31 2009, 12:33 AM
Oh Fuck Yes
Thanks in advance for the awesomeness, you two ;)

Comic Details -

 
Drawing Time: 4 weeks
Ended: Dec 12th, 2009
Votes Cast: 28
Page Views: 1243
Winner: Jackster

 

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