Thanks everybody, I'm already doing my best to make sure the second act has these suggestions put to use (even though I'm a bit worried about having a sudden shift in quality), mainly sticking to one form of cross hatching, adding more blacks, more tree studies, and not making those arms so painfully stiff. Kinda bummed this first act didn't sit to well with you folks, granted nobody seemed to like any of the first acts. Also I hated my interior shots as well...

But I do promise that things will get better :3. The first act of anything usually isn't that exciting, and if I finish this up nice and proper, I'm considering editing this first act (more story, better character development, etc...).

It's nice to see you finally do this story, although I kind of wish you'd done something totally new since I know this story has been around since before I came to Void. One thing to watch out for is your trees, you drew them very similar to how you draw hair which made them kind of look like hair and not plant life. I really think you need to incorporate some solid blacks into your work at the moment because everything feels kind of the same tone. You did a nice job on the girl, that's the best human face I've seen you do before.

looks like you put a lot of effort into this, I think you did a pretty nice job too! I agree that the cross hatching looks a bit sloppy in some areas, just do your best in trying to make your lines for the cross hatching less shaky. The anatomy on the characters is still looking stiff, I think the stiffness may come from focusing too much on the shapes and out side of the characters and not focusing enough on the inside of them. Try drawing the skeleton and muscles out for the characters first. It might help you out some. The story was alright; I'm wondering what's gonna happen in part two. Really nice work on this though, I can see that you really worked hard on it.

I like some of the creative hatching you have, but I think it's best to stick to one style.
The tree roots stick out to me, they look too much like tentacles. And the horse at the beginning doesn't look too good, the neck is too thin and the front legs look like they are attached to the front of him rather than from the side... and then his back is too straight.
I didn't think Alex looked too bad though... maybe it helps that her armor is covering her up? :3

good job as i have said before i like your style of art it kindda reminds me of yusagi yojimbo but the story is a good story but has been done But I do like the lettering and the dialog

Keep working on your proportions... they need a little work here and there.  Your inking however, is quite impressive!  One other problem is that your cross hatching is very sloppy in some areas, if you took a little more time on it, your final product would be much better!  
Good effort, and a better story than most!

nice! Your figures are still looking stiff at times, but the lines themselves were pretty clean. Though I noticed that sometimes the really thin lines look almost TOO faded; like they're in pencil and pixelly. Try and make them darker, maybe? Not sure how you would go about fixing it though... Overall the quality of the characters was about equal to the quality of your backgrounds, and that made it mesh together really well. The story was ok for me. I liked how you brought the readers into the story at the beginning, but towards the end, it just really reminded me of jack and the bean stalk. But I'm guessing you're gonna change it up a bit later on. I'm real curious about part 2 now C:

thumbs up for busting your ass on this! <3

Phill I think your backgrounds were the strongest forte of your entry.  Also it's very complete and has a decent page count.  My issue here is that your anatomy issues come to light at time particularly with arms.  The man on page two and the ogre looking thing on page eight, the proportions of those arms are too far out.  Otherwise, great entry, I look forward to the next step.

Uploaded, and I don't think my anatomy for women has improved much either.

Guys!!!

Maybe later.

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Dope!

amazing!

werd!

Hot!

gee Phill....

well i thought it was funny to do that on all these for the "nonsense hype phase"
I'm genuinely excited about the one shots and can't wait to see em, kick some ass Phill!

Er... thanks Joshua... but think maybe next time you comment you could use more than just ONE word?

tight!