Delanna Andria vs. Scarlett

Delanna Andria vs. Scarlett

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michaelharris
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# 30   Posted: Oct 10 2008, 06:15 PM
yeah, everything bad I wanted to say was pretty much covered, but it seemed like there were a lot of closeups, which I don\'t really enjoy, but thats just a preference. Everything else was great, as usual. keep up the good work.

Aluísio C. Santos
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# 29   Posted: Oct 9 2008, 10:18 AM
Thanks for all the feedbackss : D
Firstly, I\'d like to thank Jho for having kindly proofread the text for me! Thanks!

Angie: Yeah, guess I could do some studies about more facial structures on female faces, while I have to say I personally think their facial structures (like bones, jaws and etc) are different, I agree noses and even eyes got pretty similar at times. Also the hair didnt help ehhe
As for the dialogue, I\'ll do my best to keep it improving!
Thanks!

Kon: Watch for all that hornyness!!

Awesomedavid: Thanks! I\'m still adventuring to the dark side of the inks, so I\'m still experimenting a lot! Thanks for that tip! Will prove very helpful!

CJ: ahah, yeah, probably even a knife stab!!

Squiddd: Hahah thanks, glad you liked the scheme! as for the anatomy problems, if its not trouble for you, could you mention where it\'s worse, or something? :U

Dim: thankks! Yeah, I feel you for the hair, however as I limited it for 2 colors, I had little choices ; ;, but Anthropos battle will hopefully be color!

Ariboo-woo!!: Thanks! As for the Iron Maiden thingie, it was supposed to be explained in whatever was the next battle of del after vs Iri, but then this one battle right now vs Neko was something completely random, and since she could only spend one week, I wouldnt be able to draw such comic in this time, so I\'ll leave it for the next, so, I hope this comic serves as a building up!

Kumaaa: NO U
Thanks, I\'ll have those point in mind, like, totally! I\'m trying to experiment the most with inks, so I\'m giving colors less importance for a time

Hux: ahah thanks! Glad you like it, also, I hope the pretty faces wasnt annoying, I was wanting to get rid of that Delanna methface impression hahahahaha

-Z

Thankssssssssssss

Kuro
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# 28   Posted: Oct 8 2008, 10:13 AM
z, you make comics pretty. it did get a bit confusing at times given the similarities of the characters, but it wasn\'t hard to figure out who was who after looking at the details & getting the context clues.

-J

Kumaru
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# 27   Posted: Oct 7 2008, 08:43 PM
SHUT YOUR WHORE MOUTH!
Oh man Zsa, I think I\'d just be repeating what people have already pointed out, there\'s really only those specific areas you need to focus on (line variation, clarity in your black and white work, anatomy) and I know you\'re working on them \'cause I see you improve every battle!! So just keep it up, the red and blue tones in this entry really helped clarify what was going on, (although with both characters having read hair it posed another issue of confusion XDD;;;;) and although it was a clifhanger I feel like this was a solid story!

Nekkko (;_;

aribooboo
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# 26   Posted: Oct 5 2008, 10:09 AM
loved the lines and tones, they were very clean~ your line variation is one of the best i\'ve seen, so you\'re good there. The figures themselves look great, but sometimes i got confused on who was who ( Scarlett and Delanna seem to have very similar facial features ) Vary it up a little~ Though i DID love your solid black shadings oUo That\'s your thing and i love it XD the dialouge was ok; it kept me reading but i think there was a lot of things that left unanswered ( like what IS the Iron Maiden Program? though, maybe you were saving that for another comic... )  It flowed really well though~ Nice job and i look forward to anything you serve up next!

Dimension
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# 25   Posted: Oct 5 2008, 09:58 AM
Zsa, yeah, I think the girls had some pretty similar faces; it would have helped a bit to have also made one of the characters hair color, a more different red. I think your inks are solid and the two-color scheme was alright, though personally I do prefer your colors, since I think they help make everything more distinguishable. :)

nice work Zsa :D

squid
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# 24   Posted: Oct 5 2008, 09:20 AM
BUTTS AND BOOBS

I love the two-color scheme. I think I like it more than your full-color comics because it lets me enjoy your wonderful linework :3
HOWEVERR, it makes various anatomical errors more apparant :II

jayd4life
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# 23   Posted: Oct 4 2008, 08:07 PM
Delanna Andria-(zsabreuser): I\'m loving the art work , and I was fully entertained ^_^. But....only a slap....T_T, I know you could have thrown in another punch, or at least some reflex ?_?~~>Overall yah did pretty kewlz

Scarlett-(DJ Neko): T_T.....why....me was soooo eager....T_T. plz put up ANYTHING yah next match if yah can T_T....plz...

luniara
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# 22   Posted: Oct 4 2008, 07:56 PM
Krissy! WHhhhhy!?

Faux
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# 21   Posted: Oct 4 2008, 07:20 PM
Awesome job Zsabreuser! Excellent line weight, original style, and great use of perspectives.
Story line seemed a bit rushed, but it could just be me. I agree with the others about the dialogue. The color choices distracted my eye a bit, so I don\'t particularly like it, but I can see it makes the overall comic very stylized and dynamic.
So, GREAT JOB and excellent expressions.

Scarlett- TT_TT

amazingdavid
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# 20   Posted: Oct 4 2008, 02:52 PM
Too bad Neko didn\'t get to do something on this one.

Zsa- man I\'m always up in the air about your art I was going to say something about all your blacks being spotty but that\'s not true you have a wonderful control of black to white space in your panels, I was gonna say something about your anatomy but the more I looked I started to understand your style and your specific choices you took for exaggeration...So good job on the art (haha...although I think sometimes letting the characters sink into dark areas instead of outlining them in white is okay. usually it adds a bit more cohesiveness to a panel and makes it a lot less confusing)

Story wise however I wish the dialogue would have been a bit more punchy and realistic.  It seems like a bunch of tired old cliche\'s one after another, but I do think the story was an interesting departure from the \"This character meets this character randomly and they do something\" concept thats present in void. Good job man

Kon
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# 19   Posted: Oct 4 2008, 11:53 AM
I must say Zsa, this made me horny from beginning to end, from the line to the coloring. MAKE ME HORNY ONE MORE TIME

Angie
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# 18   Posted: Oct 4 2008, 11:40 AM
Zsa-Your lines are looking nice as always but I think you could have used a little more variation in the faces, Iri, Scarlett, and Delanna all seemed to have fairly similiar faces, I think it\'s the noses doing it. Like most of your noses look pretty much the same I think, while in more simpler styles like anime stuff it works, it\'s a bit more obvious when you\'re doing something a bit more realistic. My only other suggestion is the dialogue. While you\'re always improving on the dialogue, I laughed when she said SHUT YOUR WHORE MOUTH! since it came off as a little silly, but other than that your dialogue is starting to feel more natural.

Neko-dude, you broke my heart. I was really looking forward to you getting one more battle in, this is a huge shame.

Kon
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# 17   Posted: Oct 3 2008, 03:36 PM
GOOD ZSA

Aluísio C. Santos
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# 16   Posted: Oct 2 2008, 10:19 PM
Okk, battle uploaded!
It\'s better you had read the last battle before reading this to understand 100%

Aluísio C. Santos
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# 15   Posted: Sep 29 2008, 02:16 PM
No methfaces I promise ; ;

BornLoser
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# 14   Posted: Sep 29 2008, 02:03 PM
You better not be dissapointin me!

IWIHASCOE
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# 13   Posted: Sep 26 2008, 08:43 PM
You two, make it awesome please @_@

Bittermause
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# 12   Posted: Sep 26 2008, 08:08 PM
Holy shit I didn\'t see this one coming! Good luck to you both!

ronin-soul
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# 11   Posted: Sep 26 2008, 02:25 PM
The Last Mohican!

Kumaru
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# 10   Posted: Sep 26 2008, 01:36 PM
YEEEEEEEESSSSSSSSSSSSS

Yosai
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# 9   Posted: Sep 26 2008, 01:08 PM
HOW IS THIS HAPPENING

Dimension
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# 8   Posted: Sep 26 2008, 01:01 PM
omg....

this shall be quite awesome :D

Kon
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# 7   Posted: Sep 26 2008, 12:39 PM
HELL YEAH!

IWIHASCOE
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# 6   Posted: Sep 26 2008, 12:34 PM
Whoooaaaaa can\'t wait!! @_@

Angie
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# 5   Posted: Sep 26 2008, 12:32 PM
Good luck you guys! I\'m glad to see you squeezing in one last battle before you go off to the air force Neko, make it good!

Craqued
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# 4   Posted: Sep 26 2008, 12:20 PM
yaaay

jho
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# 3   Posted: Sep 26 2008, 11:59 AM
better have some lesbo scenes aight

Aluísio C. Santos
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# 2   Posted: Sep 26 2008, 11:56 AM
LADIES WILL DANCE TONIGHT

Krissy
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# 1   Posted: Sep 26 2008, 11:53 AM
SCARLETT\'S DESIGN SHEET WILL BE CHANGED BEFORE THIS IS OVER.

Oh god, I\'m so nervous I can puke. Puke everywhere.

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Drawing Time: 1 week
Ended: Oct 10th, 2008
Votes Cast: 29
Page Views: 1608
Winner: Aluísio C. Santos
 

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