ah thx for z\' critique guys...heh they do help point out somethings I need to work on later on
Still learning how to create comics c:
Nowhere Boy vs. Jack
Critiques & Comments
# 17
Posted:
Oct 14 2008, 05:12 PM
# 16
Posted:
Oct 14 2008, 10:11 AM
points for the bev bighead cameo. that was a funny episode of rocko. coulda used more in the way of backgrounds though.
and nice washes in yours, odd. but work on your layouts. the panels kinda sat haphazardly for no real reason. like squidman said before me, you\'re not optimizing your space.
-J
and nice washes in yours, odd. but work on your layouts. the panels kinda sat haphazardly for no real reason. like squidman said before me, you\'re not optimizing your space.
-J
# 15
Posted:
Oct 14 2008, 07:38 AM
odd: I just had a couple of issues with panel coherence.. in some sequences, it wasn\'t clear what was happening.. When NB sneaks up on that horned guy, it\'s not clear that he shocked him into spilling his coffee.. Maybe it would help to exagerrate the horned guy\'s pose so that it really looks like he seized up when NB poked him.
Also, you\'ve got a lot of gutter space; why not make your panels bigger? And line them up when you can; the panels in this are all uneven.. and don\'t vary the panel border widths.
Finally, I didn\'t understand the purpose of the random object silhouettes o.O Sometimes it was just distracting, like that upside-down bike..
I thought that you pulled off NB really well. He and Jack seem to make a good cartoon couple.
mecid, yeah I have no complaints; it was very funny.
Also, you\'ve got a lot of gutter space; why not make your panels bigger? And line them up when you can; the panels in this are all uneven.. and don\'t vary the panel border widths.
Finally, I didn\'t understand the purpose of the random object silhouettes o.O Sometimes it was just distracting, like that upside-down bike..
I thought that you pulled off NB really well. He and Jack seem to make a good cartoon couple.
mecid, yeah I have no complaints; it was very funny.
# 14
Posted:
Oct 9 2008, 11:02 AM
Nowhere Boy by( mecid ):I loved the ending with mrs.Fathead. HA! pure classic. And the guy complaining about tournaments XD. Yah artwork was pretty decent too, keep up the good work ^_^.(lmao :Oh baby Oh baby Oh Baby)
Jack by (Odd13 ): LMAO. Thee old mask puling trick...dam that hurts XD especially when he sweelled up ahahahahaha. heh big phat lipz >,<.As for the quality-->it was pretty decent to me but yea. Great job n Keep it up.
Jack by (Odd13 ): LMAO. Thee old mask puling trick...dam that hurts XD especially when he sweelled up ahahahahaha. heh big phat lipz >,<.As for the quality-->it was pretty decent to me but yea. Great job n Keep it up.
# 13
Posted:
Oct 9 2008, 09:36 AM
Mecid-I died when I saw the Rocko reference haha You\'re getting really good with pencils even though occasionally the panels felt a little empty. But I think in this comic you can pretty easily get away with it. Other than that I really enjoyed the comic. You, Dawg, and Spinzoa are some of the only artists that consistently make me laugh with your comics on this site.
Odd13-I think it would have helped you a lot to aim for a lower page count so you could have had nice quality across the whole thing. I found the comic cute and Jack is a charming character, aside from your quality lacking, my only real complaint would be with the layout of your text. Occasionally the text gets cut off by the panels. Even though I can read what they\'re saying, it doesn\'t look very good to do that. Hope you have better luck on your next battle!
Odd13-I think it would have helped you a lot to aim for a lower page count so you could have had nice quality across the whole thing. I found the comic cute and Jack is a charming character, aside from your quality lacking, my only real complaint would be with the layout of your text. Occasionally the text gets cut off by the panels. Even though I can read what they\'re saying, it doesn\'t look very good to do that. Hope you have better luck on your next battle!
# 12
Posted:
Oct 9 2008, 03:25 AM
Mecid your comic was epically hilarious, quite a clever story line. The last panel cracked me up.
# 11
Posted:
Oct 8 2008, 10:27 PM
Mecid: I still say \"Oh baby oh baby oh baby\" like... every day. That last Rocko ref cracked me up good. XD As always, I love your art and sense of humor. You have some of the best comical battles on VOID, no question. Loved the random people, too.. DEFAULT LOL hahaha. Brill. <3
Odd13: Your style is too fun, seriously. I really enjoyed your kooky expressions. The panels seemed a bit crowded at times, but it was still readable. Also quite funny, a fun ready. :>
Nice job BOTH OF YOU. D<
Odd13: Your style is too fun, seriously. I really enjoyed your kooky expressions. The panels seemed a bit crowded at times, but it was still readable. Also quite funny, a fun ready. :>
Nice job BOTH OF YOU. D<
# 10
Posted:
Oct 8 2008, 08:34 PM
YES YES YES YES YES GO GO GO GO GO
# 9
Posted:
Oct 8 2008, 08:32 PM
I\'m sure your side will be neat.
Mine should be all there. Might need to take a break for a while, though.
Mine should be all there. Might need to take a break for a while, though.
# 8
Posted:
Oct 8 2008, 09:19 AM
heh, my goods are uploaded
I look forward to seeing your work mecid
I look forward to seeing your work mecid
# 7
Posted:
Sep 12 2008, 11:40 AM
Oh man this will be fun!!!
# 6
Posted:
Sep 11 2008, 03:49 AM
This is going to be rather trippy XD
# 5
Posted:
Sep 10 2008, 07:46 PM
o wow this is prty cool
# 4
Posted:
Sep 10 2008, 06:50 PM
Ooo o.o;
sweet~
sweet~
# 3
Posted:
Sep 10 2008, 01:31 PM
Awesome! Can\'t wait for this guys!
# 2
Posted:
Sep 10 2008, 10:16 AM
SNAPP
# 1
Posted:
Sep 10 2008, 10:15 AM
Ohhhhh awesome juices!
Regular Match
Drawing Time:
4 weeks
Ended:
Oct 15th, 2008
Votes Cast:
38
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2147
Winner:
mecid
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Odd- Good work little sister! What I would suggest for a more oldtimey look is google paper textures, save a few and OVERLAY them on your images. You get that nice gritty feel and the texture adds a special something.