WRONG.

wolfboy, looks like you\'re taking a hit on the polls over those tl;dr blocks of text, but the parts that were actually pictures I quite enjoyed.

TOTALLY! It was like he actually wanted people to read it or something

-J

yeah, and the text was too easy to read.

or the previous comments because i mentioned it earlier & thought it was hysterical. he did forget the haphazard illustrations in the middle of the walls of text though. they would have sealed the deal.

-J

Jack> I loved your comic. BUT IT WASN\'T FINISHED, actually I\'m not even sure it wasn\'t. This text you placed between your pages was just too awesome, I LAUGHED HARD. Just like King or Squid I thing that was just awesome. BUT UNFINISHED COMIC STILL.

I think.

Kuro> Artwise it was awesome as usual, you really have a talent to make your stuff look nice and fun. BUT IT WAS CONFUSING. I think it was the way you placed you text on your pages, it was just not right. Fun but hard to read

well I assumed that they didn\'t read his BR entry or something.

I love how no one gets Jack is making fun of Kuro with the text pages.  I thought that was one of the funniest burns I\'ve seen here in a long while.

Kuro, pretty good art. THe double page thing kinda bothered me, because in a few cases they were two separate pages that didn\'t really need to be put together. You also have a great deal of set-up for not a lot of payoff. We go through a bunch of pages of them getting there, we even get the names of his crewmates, then we immediately never see them again. The creative use of non-backgrounds got kind of annoying after a while. I really enjoyed the art though.

Jack, um try to finish it next time.

Both were great...but the evil non pages....eh...it happens

thanks squid. i was thinking of the wide screen format a bit like facing pages of a comic. you can do a spread across the two facing pages or keep each page separate. i think switching back & forth kind of killed it in spots. but it is something i\'m going to play around with some more. thanks a lot!

-J

*Pens I was using died

Yeah, the lack of line widths really killed me, but all but one of the died on the same page

I like what you\'re doing with your comics, Kuro... I mean, I guess they don\'t \"flow\" in the same way I\'m used to from other comics, but is nessessarily a bad thing? I don\'t know. Maybe it\'s a little harder to really \"lose\" yourself in the world when you are jumping all over the page with separate flashbacks and stylistic tricks. But I could still follow the story and everything. Although sometimes the sporatic layouts become disorienting when you switch back-and-forth between panels going vertical and those going horizontal.
yeah, I don\'t have answers, I\'m just throwing stuff out there XD

jack: I like your style, but sometimes details got lost in all the lines. Like in the panel where Rob\'s covered with scorpion-looking worm things. Maybe you could have used color to help differenciate, that or played with different values? Or more blacks. Anyways, I loved the giant mouth that Slaughterface was sitting in, and \"Planet Nature\" in general.

hahahahahahahaha!

ok. while i suck & never finish? i only wrote the one apology. but that was funny. i really dig those watercolors where you had them jack. and that graboid throne turned out real nice! you need an index for the references in mine? hahah

sixtem- jack & i were competing to see who could make the most references. the bits with the text aren\'t exposition but more a nod to generation kill\'s intro & outro sequences where it\'s just radio squealing over black. the intro bit isn\'t really expository as ultimately, it\'s not really important. the bit later on was only to compress time a bit & get more done. BR\'s the only other battle with expository stuff. so i don\'t know what you mean by most of my stuff relies on it. and i figured with the detail i spent on some of those forest bits, i could cop out on the darkness while they were trying to get it on. what\'s a matter, can you only do it with the lights on? haha thanks

phil- don\'t get abrasive with jack. it was a jab at me. relax. and henriksen\'s supposed to have no personality other than badass. have you watched things with space marines before? but anyway, thanks for the crits on mine. i was thinking a few bits were going to be hard to read but i still just wanted to try them. wherever the panels didn\'t follow standard flow, i tried to group them a little & keep it readable, like make them parenthetical haha. but i understand. while your eyes may have gotten a bit of a work out, the word balloons should have been ok. thanks

anyway sorry again it didn\'t end the way i was aiming but thanks for the quick crits so far.

-J

Well I kinda have some mixed feelings about this battle.


Hux: Stinks about the soda accident, but dems the brakes right? This was a pretty decent comic from ya dude, but the layout of it all was just way too confusing at times, my eyes were darting left and right while trying to find the right word balloon and panel to read first. I can understand wanting to play around and experiment, but you gotta watch out for things like panel placement and directing your readers eyes where they need to go. Sucks you couldn\'t truly finish this up nice and proper as well.



Jack: What happened here? You had plenty of time man, I\'ve seen you hanging out on the DA chat for hours on end during the deadline, there was plenty of time to do what you wanted. The pages you had look good, but you seriously need to work on your cross hatching, half of the time it looks neat and nicely pulled off, the other half of the time it\'s just sloppy and distracting. Also, granted I\'m not great at stories myself, this is a real letdown.

I do not like this character either, he has no personality and it seems the main focus on this guy is just making him \"THE COOLEST THING EVER!\", I mean... re-read what you just wrote on pages 5 and 6! That is total masturbation! And you\'ve ridiculed and ripped into others for less than this man. Give this guy some personality like simple loves and hates to make him more than just another two dimensional space marine who\'s sole purpose is \"Being cool\". I KNOW that there\'s more to this guy than what I\'m saying, but you gotta show us.




Vote goes to Kuro.

I wish I could say this was a surprise.

Kuro: The really weird pacing bugged me and the black background for Henriksen\'s apartment seemed real lazy. I liked your idea for a story, but a page of blatant exposition\'s kinda boring. Maybe you should\'ve amped up the tongue-in-cheek humor about a full page of rambling exposition. Most of your comics seem to rely on exposition.

Jack: The 40k influences are strong with this one. Of course, what accent would space savages have OTHER than cockney? I liked the story. It was steeped in a shitton of sci-fi staples and cliches, but that\'s what the reader expects. Only thing I can really point out since this is unfinished is that you should really erase your pencils. I don\'t know why you refuse to, but I haven\'t seen one fucking comic from you that didn\'t have pencil lines all over the fuck.

Fake Hux apology letter thanks to Corny, fake summaries by Corny and Hiemie, real summary by me.

Hux, that was real great, I wish you\'d gotten a chance to finish but you really pulled off something super here.

yes! I have something to read when I get back from the bar! I love yetis.

c\'est super!

save some for Angie.

:3

Your ar both on my top ten... If you dissapoint me ill kill your unborn babies >8U *GRAWR!*

I really hope xenomorris makes a comeback

FRAG

With guest appearances by Korgi the Super Dog and Chris Hansen.

you tits

This is making me horny

Put kittens in this, it\'ll make me smile.

MORE SATAN LESS TEXT

Spacesquatch

hey!! in the words of the great warrior poet elvis costello:
\'(What\'s so funny about) Peace, Love, & Understanding(?)\'

-J

These should be nice, and upbeat, with a message of love and understanding. It ends with them hugging each other!

HENRIKSEN VS. PLANET OF THE SPACESQUATCHES


YOU MANIACS, YOU FRAGGED IT UP, FRAG YOU ALL TO FRRRAAAAAAAAAAGGGGG

ok ok ok ok less cock more rock


... in space

-J