I loved it. I especially liked the moment when Claymore encountered the alien. Cool comic

Thanks for all the comments. I hope to get time to do something more really soon.
It really. i thank you guys for making me a bit more confident in my english writing skills.

-Helf

oh helftan, you so crazy.
great work. i really enjoyed the story & the art was nuts. colors looked fine as stark as they were, but out of personal preference, i\'d love to see what you could accomplish with more subtle, less saturated tones.

more!

-J

Wow o.o  Really interesting story Helftan. This was much better than your last battle. I do think the colors really fit the comic style and everything, but sometimes the colors were a bit too strong... such as the green on page 6. Also I think your inks are looking good, the solid black shadows on the characters work well. I feel that you could vary the lines widths a bit more, like on page one; Claymore seems to blend in with the background.

Nice stuff though :3

I agree on using a ruler here and there, but it didn\'t bother me too much.
I like the dead colours you used in combination
 with lots of shadow and blacks.  Your storytelling definately did it, it was done in such a way i actually felt sorry for those getting hurt/tortured.

It\'s tough losing an eye. I know what it\'s like

Keep up the good stuff mang! Got me interested.

Awesome. This is some good shit. The quality of the story is way higher than the quality of the art, but having said that, the art is still good and I happen to like un-polished artwork. Total entertainment. More please.

Thanks again you guys. I was really worried that no one would understand the story
and that it would only make sense inside my head so it is really motivating that
you guys understood it and further seemed to like it  . . . Wuhaa

This was really rad.  I love the way the story was worded, and your style is just so artsy.

dude, your story was far out. I love the textures of the shadowing and the alien was an absolute x-file moment.

I really like the style you\'re forming here, Helftan - some simple lines, but very complex shadows and \"structures\" to scenes. I like he color pallette as well.

thanks guys. still getting used to doing this kinda pulp comic style. normally i only illustrate books
this is merely a hobby that is starting to get serious . you guys and your serious ways is really a big help Cheers

Yikes.  That was pretty grim, son.  

Yes, this is definitely LIGHT YEARS beyond your battle.  It\'s a lot cleaner, tighter, and easier to read.  Especially impressed with the panel arrangement.  

Keep it up!  

great effort!
If you used rulers for your panels & managed your gutter space, pages 2-5 would ba A material.

This is a lot better than your battle with Fabulous, I hope you plan on maintaining this quality. I think this would have worked even better with an even more limited color palette, it could have really helped bring out the atmosphere and such. Be careful with your anatomy though, while I know your style isn\'t meant to be super realistic or anything, it\'s something that\'s well worth working on.

Whooa that was a pretty interesting read, Helf. The narrative writing was good, like Zsa indicated. You could easily put yourself in the character\'s shoes \'cause of it, which is definitely a plus.

I think Quality wise, it was better than your first battle. Your drawings have alot more depth to it this time, especially with the added solid blacks of your inks and a certain kind of palette to suit the serious war mood here -- the green/purple alien dealie could have indicated that Claymore saw things differently compared to the reader, heh.

Nice stuff dude, you\'ve got a great distinctive art style here.

Zsa heh thanks for the head up on the writing
before more people talk about the green thing. he was green in the
start but then i recalled a character called Ape sapien and looked back
at the comic i just did. and there he was ape sapien was sitting in the
char in my comic. so i changed him to purple.


And yes Zsa we HAVE to at some point !

hey Jaws thanks for the kind words . You can always do it better , on this thing i just wanted to do something for void while i had the time . i am kinda busy at the time so it was wonderful to put away a little week to do this. anywhom hope you guys will enjoy it

It looked very nice, helf!
The inks are really good, they are so dark and yet so clear!
I think the colors are really good, though the sometimes get a bit out of place, as the blues in the helicopter explosion, though that certainly added the contrast an explosion demands!
I loved the writing, it added a lot to the telling, and you use very interesting way to describe how Clay sees things.
I don\'t think the purple/green alien issue is a problem really, I mean, Claymore was already fucked up by having just lost an eye, that he couldn\'t really care if the alien even was there, when he lost his limbs. That was really cool.

You know we have to fight sometime!

i really liked this i feel like it could have been a little better tho, the only thing that really got me was the fact you said the alien was greenish but he was clearly purple. but i\'ll leave the fancy critiqueing tho those that like to do it. all i can saw it keep up the good work but i know you can do better