Seeing as everyone is pretty much done for crits, its comment time. :>

Corny-I\'d love to battle you sometime! :3 I\'m pretty much open anytime I\'m not actually IN a battle. Just E-mail me if you ever find the time.

Angie- That sounds like a pretty good schedule actually. I\'ll have to try it next time.

Squid man- Yeah, by the time I realized that the comic was too long for my time, it was too late to go through and change it up to make it shorter, so I pretty much had to just go with it.

Joshua- To explain the wrench, it was in the trash bag. I didn\'t think to draw it actually broken [because why would someone put a perfectly good wrench in the trash?] I needed to put more detail into into those panels where it shows up, but I rushed. so... ]:

 In general, thanks everyone for the input. As far as lettering goes, the only programs I own that can even do that would be MS paint. I just really don\'t like how it looks, so I didn\'t use it. Legibility should come before looks, I\'ll be sure to either write better or type it out. As far as story goes, I personally though that the beginning was too horridly slow. Anyway, theres always a next time. Thanks again for the input, it was greatly helpful.

thank you for all the kind words everyone. Im sorry if I have disappointed anyone for not completing the colors. If I had, the panels would have been more defined. I will try to gain my motivation back with a beyond battle i will be working on to further the \"mysterious letter\" plot I am developing. Hopefully it will be up soon. I wi also try to improve on my faults that you have kindly brought to my attention. Thank you marreck for the battle^^ I liked yours, the outfit you gave Cyd is definately one of my favorites^^ Thanks to everyone for your encouragement^^

Scope:

I thought the art was ok, don\'t think the colors did much for it but give people something to complain about, maybe only use them when you can continue throughout the comic, or if you have a distinct title page or something.  In some comics anthologies like shonen jump, they do this \"color lead in\"
 thing then it transitions to grayscale, but thats because of printing budgets, online comics have no such limitations, so no reason for it in my opinion. Only other problem with the art is page 6, the \"meat of the battle\" i\'m confused by a couple panels, and where did the bag come from? where did the wrench come from? Other than that page the sketchiness didn\'t bother me.  People already said about the handwriting, I agree.

Good expressions on your character and Cyd, but the shop owner looked kinda generic. I definitely like the way you draw the main chars. Story was ok, good look at Merrik\'s personality, I feel you handled Cyd pretty good, but don\'t know if he\'d be taken out so easily. ( again, where did this wrench come from). I think you could be more creative with how your character wins battles, since he\'s more of a regular dude than a supernatural.
Cool first comic, mostly good effort, pretty entertaining.  Keep on truckin!


V:

Veery coool! your stories are mad engaging.  I like the split personalities of Cyd/Quill, he reminds me of myself in some of his ways, which is kinda scary! XD You make your character very much alive. I was confused like others in the beginning, but not for long.  I think it was cool how Quill was struggling to keep control of Cydney while waiting for his boss\' instructions.

You draw supporting characters well, they look as good as your \"stars\" I liked how you handled Merrick also, since Cyd and his familiars would probably rip him apart; but he has dumb luck on his side and of course, the protection of the letter, fuckin rad.  Great expressions, poses n stuff too in here.
A couple of the silhouettes were wonky, but mostly good stuff. Page 8 bottom panel i have no idea whats going on, rest was clear. Only thing I couldn\'t get over were the irregular edges of your pages, but just because they were all pixelated, otherwise would be fine.

Although life sucks and you didn\'t color all the pages(I feel ya!) There was a great moment of serendipity on page 3 and 4, I guess it was unintentional, but the transition from the clean white and black pages (of the world outside the house, when Merrick is intro\'d) to the dark/colored pages (when he enters the house) really heightened the mood of the setting, and danger of the house now that Quill has overrun it with his PURE EVIL! For me, this was very cool, probly could be done with contrasting color too.  When you get back at the arts, maybe experiment more with contrasts like this?
Great stuff, don\'t give up! you got something goin on here with the comics and I look forward to your future battles. Ya got my vote.

Diascope-- There was a hint of a good story here, and the set-up seemed interesting.. it\'s hard to comment, though, because the comic seems to be really rushed. I don\'t know what happed, so I\'m not trying to lecture or something, but maybe try a shorter story next time you\'re pressed for time? Again, I don\'t know what happened, so if that doesn\'t apply to you, feel free to ignore me xD

V-- I liked the story.. it didn\'t seem to be all that original, but I think you pulled it off all right. The ending came way out of left field, but that didn\'t bother me too much :>... although it might have made a better ending if there had been some sort of explaination, or at least a hint, as to why the letter was so important to Cydney that it somehow made Quill come out as he was waiting for it..?
I didn\'t care for the dark, yellow overlay... it was especially jarring when it skipped from that to black and white in some pages. I think it\'s better to either skip overlays entirely, or go all the way, and color in other places.. such as coloring the characters... and maybe for the outdoors/lighter pages, there could have been a light blue overlay or something, similarly done. Reading the comments, it sounds like you simply weren\'t able to finish? But if that\'s the case... I really think it would have looked a lot nicer to simply leave them black and white.

Good job guys. I totally feel ya about real life pressures. I\'ll focus more on the story than the art.

Diascope: Like the art the story felt rushed. I know it\'s hard to come up with original material all the time. I liked the way it started, but then it slowed and it never really moved. Almost as if you ran out of time and cut a few pages from your original intended story.

V: I felt your story was definitely more thought out. A beginning, middle and ending. I saw a few sideplots running through there for just a ten-page story. Good job. Cydney is still a lovable sick twisted little monkey, how do you pull that off?

Anyway good job to both and hope to see more.

Diascope: Well I\'m glad that you\'ve finally pulled through with your first battle comic! Story was simple enough, and your character facial expressions were humorous and entertaining ( you did a damn fine job with Cyd\'s psychotic happy face). However,  the last few pages didn\'t feel complete and rushed. Angie basically gave the same advice I wanted to mention so I will refrain from repeating.  Otherwise, I\'m very happy that you went ahead and did your battle like you originally intended, and not run off and perma-retire.

V: Again, you never cease to get me so curious about Cydney and what he\'s really all about. I enjoyed the story, it seemed very complete to me. The ending seemed abrupt with Cyd just taking off...but then again I\'m an impatient bastard and I desire to know what\'s going to happen next with him and the letter he just got. I definetly look forward to battling your character as soon as you rekindle your motivation.

Diascope: i was liked how it started to look, but as it went on, it seemed kinda rushed. I actually liked the style you were using and it looked neat! I think your style is great and i just wish you could have put that all the way through. Though, i really loved that colored page :] It was easy to follow but sometimes it was hard to read with your hand written text ( maybe you should try using computer text next time, see how you like it? ) I think this is a good start though; i got a pretty good idea of Marreck\'s personality. Great portrayal of Cydney too! =] Can\'t wait to see what Marreck ventures into next!

V: Even though your coloring is pretty simple and even though you didn\'t color everything, it still made it seem full. I think if you\'re not gonna color, you should still put that beige-ish color over the lines, like you did ( all the pages without color at all seemed really bright, but maybe that\'s only because the pages before that had color... ). I liked the backgrounds too; it gave me a sort of \"Alice in Wonderland\" feel. It was fun to look around :] I liked where the story was going, but i was confused at first ( like, who\'s Josie? ) But i think i figured it out. It didn\'t distract me that much =3 I always love what Cydney gets into <3 i would have loved to have seen gore and blood on those pile of people and trash Cydeny and that girl where sitting on top of, but the drawing still had that \"OH SHIT\" effect <3 more more more! =]

@Diascope: not bad, I\'m not sure if I liked all the sketchyness that was in it, but I thought the story was nice :3 but yeah as others have said: it wasw hard to read your writting. D:> sorry.


@V:haha, cute story :3 The colored pages look really good and I think it would have been great if you kept it that way. still I enjoy reading you comics

Great Job Guys! x3

Dia - FINALLY, GWARSH. Umm, your comic was awesome, then I got to page two. D: The story continued, and it was pretty awesome. I liked the story, it was funny. :3 The art felt rushed near the end and your handwriting is as bad as mine. Either try typing the dialogue or take more time to write neater. I really wished you could\'ve done more on the fighting scene cause yer awesome. :C

V - Angie pretty much covered it. Also, use thick outlines when things are closer to the foreground, thinner when they\'re closer to the background (some people use none when it\'s in the background). Would\'ve liked to see more color and indication of Marreck\'s mark on colorless pages.

Diascope-It\'s nice to see you turn in a battle! I do think you would really benefit from slowing down and getting a good hold on your time management. It helps to devote 1 week to pencilling/planning, 1.5 weeks to ink, and 1.5 weeks to color/letter/do finishing touches. You have to be strict with yourself to accomplish it, but it can be done as something will almost always come up during battles. (I\'m a full time college student and work 20-30 hours a week it can be done XD) I thought the story was cute but it was difficult to read sometimes with the hand written text. There\'s really not much I can say in the way of critiques beyond slow down.

V-Well in the past you\'ve been pretty good about having complete battles so I don\'t think I really need to give you the above lecture or anything. Life happens, you just have to do what you can to roll with the punches. Anyways, I think you could have given the readers a little more introduction into what was happening. It took me a few pages to realize what was going on in the story. I\'ve read your previous battles and maybe I just forgot that Cydney has a harem going on? Be careful with your linewidths, try not to give the characters a crazy bold outline, try to make that outline gradually go into the inside lines so the bold lines don\'t stick out so much. (hopefully that made sense) Also try to give your comic some gutters, having no space between the panels tends to clutter things up. Other than that it would have been nice if you had finished but like I said, life happens.

blah. If I wasn\'t booked for battles I would totally take on Marreck. I absolutely love the style you used in the first page. If you\'d gotten to finish your battle, it woulda been sweet. But I liked what I saw there. IT jumped around a bit and didn\'t have backgrounds much, but I enjoyed it. It was easy to follow.

Cydney, I\'ve only read about half of your battle, and from what I saw it looks good. The writing is very good. You have a penchant for dialogue.

well, it looks like you got a week more now o.o

iSeriously. There were still about 10 hours left on the clock when this was posted. I was using that time too. I want to know why this went up too early. I\'m going to mail my pages to Wei anyway. I\'m sorry but this is bullshit. ]:

What the helllllll   ;_;

wait what? I still had time on this! D:>

sorry you are having a hard time( I can totally relate) good luck, still rooting for ya.

  Ahhh V I can\'t wait. Sorry that you\'re having a hard time with life right now. ]: I\'m still drawing on my side, but I\'m pretty sure I can get at least all of the inks done.  Good luck to you too! :] -salutes-

I\'ve finished drawing my comic, but I have lost motivation to finish coloring it.
(having a hard time in life) I will post, but Im sorry. Good luck to you Diascope^^

Yay!! 3 days!!!!! Good luck to both!

Frigging surgery.
I\'m good now though. Whoop!

YES! I shamefully forgot that this match was meant to happen. Glad to hear diascope\'s in better shape, and I was wondering when you\'d come around again V! Good luck to you both!

woooo, we up and at \'em again?? =]

Yay!!! Double dose of Cyd. My beyond battle should be up in a week! good luck V! You\'re my Hero!!

the fight used to be up, but diascope got sick, so we recheduled. Alls better now though^^

well they cancelled it due to health problems on Diascope\'s side I think

Wait.



Wasn\'t this fight up already?