Dr. Fabulous vs. Claymore

Dr. Fabulous vs. Claymore

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by Helftan

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JoshuaEliGilley
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# 27   Posted: Apr 21 2008, 12:58 PM
RoflQu:

I like how you put the words \"I would\" in Claymore\'s mouth on page 4.
Plus all the shit everyone else said.

Helftan:

This was a funny story I thought, also creepy.
You have a crazy style, but some of it just looks sloppy.  Also, the dr fab truck changes from cyan to purple?  Overall, I liked your coloring on intro pages for your character much more.
Good first effort, tighten it up, keep that stylish flare. I agree you should slow down, proofread your work. Had rofl finished, you woulda got whooped.


Rone Rivendale
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# 26   Posted: Apr 19 2008, 09:17 AM
Please tell me I didn\'t just see what I thought I saw on Claymore\'s page 7. I\'m the one who is scarred now.

Helftan
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# 25   Posted: Apr 17 2008, 04:07 AM
thanks for all the feednack. i kinda said yes to this battle out of sheer exitement of this site.
so i used my breaks and spare time on it,i agree that i should use more time on my stuff,
anywhom next time i accept a battle hopefully the other dude will make a real comic,and to
the people saying that we did equally bad i spit on you guys ! anywhom thanks for the feedback

Kuro
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# 24   Posted: Apr 16 2008, 07:43 PM
helftan, you goofy vulgar bastard haha. it was funny as heck, but i agree about the white space all over. & dude, slow down & make it crazy awesome, not just crazy haha

rofl, what happened man? i love it when you complete a page but yeah. manage your time better man

-J

squid
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# 23   Posted: Apr 16 2008, 09:19 AM
Helftan, not bad at all, but there seems to be a lot of unneeded white space between that made scolling feel like work. You could have had less pages with more panels, drawn on a smaller page, or made the panels bigger. There might be other soultions, those are just some I can think of.
Also, there is lack of environment. I think that could have been easily fixed if there had been an establishing shot of Claymore\'s neighborhood when he walked outstide. Not too bad a battle; you had a good story going, it just feels like there should have been more meat for nine pages.

Rofl.. I\'m having trouble keeping up with all of the characters that Fabulous hangs out with
@-@
I think page 4 would have been fine without the quick marker tone job, just looks kinda sloppy and think the inks would have held up better on their own.
I guess I can\'t say much else, but I always look foreward to your comics, and it will be no different with your next. Better luck to ya.

Kozispoon
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# 22   Posted: Apr 15 2008, 03:02 AM
Was I the only one who got to page 7 in Helftan\'s battle and cracked the hell up?? XDD That was totally unexpected! I do agree with the above comments about your quality of work, so I wont repeat it. If you can churn out 9 pages make them look spectacular man! As it stands it looked like you whipped them all up in a day. Show us what we saw in the Incubator ;)

That dreaded time management curse got to you too eh? You keep leaving me with cliffhangers I\'m dying to see completed. Your expressions kill me, and I love how over the top you make everyone in your battles. Great rendition of Claymore too, by the way :D

Bittermause
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# 21   Posted: Apr 14 2008, 10:09 PM
Roflqu - Well dude, I think I already mentioned this on AIM so if I repeated anything, my bad. The original plot line you had going was brilliantly well put, though it was sad that we couldn\'t have seen it in action. I know how it feels to have an incomplete submission, and it\'s a crappy feeling I know. But, you now know to manage your time a little better right? Not to mention to try and stay focused on your original projects before jumping into another. ( SDT being  a set example. )
One thing you could\'ve done too is post the script of what was going on, rather than post the pages out of order. True, everyone would rather see actual sequentials but when you get in a rut like that, it\'s better than not having the story told at all. Second pointer is to try not to have too many secondary characters involved. It\'s cool to have Finnegan and all the gang in cameo shots but it\'s more important to stay focused on the main characters interacting with the other primary character.

Helftan - Although you brought a complete story, there wasn\'t much for me to swallow creativity wise. How the doctor got the scar just didn\'t seem much of a scar at all. People get tattoos on their asses all the time, man. But what disappointed me a little was the fact that Claymore wasn\'t the one to give Fabulous the scar, just some random masked dude. There wasn\'t much character interaction between him and dr fabulous besides the bed scene.

Gah...I\'m sorry guys i wish i could say more. My critiquing is a bit weak tonight. Next time you guys have another go with other characters, use your time management more wisely and be more careful with character interactions.

Airlight
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# 20   Posted: Apr 14 2008, 07:13 PM
Rofl - fragmented, incoherent plot, but decent art.. if you had finished..  

Helf - had a plot.. but.. well, I wasn\'t as fond as the art. Your quality could use some work, helf - with all this time you had, you could have done a better job on the comic. It was kinda funny, but still.



fowlie
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# 19   Posted: Apr 14 2008, 04:01 PM
I agree with Angie, you boys need to take more time on your comics, get focused, in the zone... something.

Rofl: man, you know I love you, but I really want to see something finished from you.  The full story, full inks, and full color or grays or tones or whatever!

Helf, you should really take your time and make your comics on VOID look nice, some of your work is just SO cool, like that book, but this was just crap. :/

Angie
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# 18   Posted: Apr 14 2008, 03:52 PM
All I have to say to either of you is SPEND MORE TIME ON YOUR COMICS!

justarhymes
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# 17   Posted: Apr 14 2008, 03:41 PM
helf- page 5 was the funniest page I\'ve ever seen.  and, I know you can do much better art wise, but this is so incredibly entertaining that it almost doesn\'t matter.  Like, seriously, it\'s one of the best comics I\'ve ever read.

rofl- stop drawing finnegan, segio, and nova so much.  it\'s kind of weird.  there\'s not much to say about the actual comic since there isn\'t much there.  but you seem to have the same issues with clarity.

Chia
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# 16   Posted: Apr 14 2008, 03:35 PM
Both sides disappointed me... 4 weeks and just.. ARGH! Sorry but I just couldn\'t vote in favor of either. D\'s across the board.

Aluísio C. Santos
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# 15   Posted: Mar 17 2008, 08:23 AM
Rofl has just uploaded a new avatar with his scar. Permasmile

jesse
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# 14   Posted: Mar 14 2008, 11:05 AM
Cut off his other arm, Qu!

Helftan
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# 13   Posted: Mar 13 2008, 02:42 PM
oh my scar match . . .

rabbitrabbit
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# 12   Posted: Mar 13 2008, 11:34 AM
You\'re all lunatics!!!  

Angie
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# 11   Posted: Mar 13 2008, 11:29 AM
Go for it guys!

Aluísio C. Santos
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# 10   Posted: Mar 13 2008, 08:22 AM
I sense Hitler moustache.

Bittermause
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# 9   Posted: Mar 13 2008, 12:43 AM
Patriotic bad ass against a fluffy gay super villain...
Martha, get the kids down to the bomb shelter! We\'re in for one hell of a night!

E.W. Schneider
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# 8   Posted: Mar 12 2008, 10:14 PM
THE SHOW\'S CHANGED, BITCHES. NOW IT\'S A FUCKING NARRATIVE AND I\'M LIKE GODDAMN BATMAN.

Helftan
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# 7   Posted: Mar 9 2008, 08:38 AM
Hope it turns out good . . .

Red
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635 comments
# 6   Posted: Mar 8 2008, 09:04 PM
I sense epicness

Lazereyes
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# 5   Posted: Mar 8 2008, 08:02 AM
Oh my word

Dimension
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# 4   Posted: Mar 7 2008, 07:10 PM
ohhh this is gonna be sweet :3

good luck to you on your first battle,  Helftan. :3

aaand RoflQu, can\'t wait to see what you\'ll put up XD

Kuro
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# 3   Posted: Mar 7 2008, 05:50 PM
oh fuck yes.

and i\'ll be watching this. ready to strike.

-J

Aluísio C. Santos
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735 comments
# 2   Posted: Mar 7 2008, 05:12 PM
What do you mean by Regular Battle

E.W. Schneider
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1042 comments
# 1   Posted: Mar 7 2008, 04:59 PM
FREEDOM.

Comic Details -

 
Type: Scar Match
Drawing Time: 4 weeks
Ended: Apr 21st, 2008
Votes Cast: 35
Page Views: 2038
Winner: Helftan

 

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