Jazz vs. Swallow

Jazz vs. Swallow

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by Craqued

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rabbitrabbit
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334 comments
# 18   Posted: Sep 27 2007, 08:01 PM
Okay, if it looks like I wrote these comics in a fever-induced haze... it\'s because I did.  

Puzzlething: You\'ve added some whites to your crazy colors and spotted blacks, and I think it makes a world of difference.  It\'s quite a bit easier to read than your last battle, even if there are still a couple issues yet (I couldn\'t tell someone had been punched until the third read-through).  I really liked the cute story and the kooky 1920\'s slang.  There are a lot of typos, but it doesn\'t look like you honestly think that\'s the right way to spell the words, it looks like you were typing way too fast and accidentally pressed three keys at a time sometimes... it got to the point where it was kinda distracting.  I little proofreading goes a long way.  But by far my BIGGEST complaint is... *I* wanted to draw Swallow as a flapper, darn you!!  ;_;  I thought it was an excellent battle.  

Craqued: I love the visual language you\'ve got going on - Swallow\'s ear turning into a mouth to show her internal voices, the comic panel cracking in half when the other personality enters.  It was very creative, I dug it.  I like the wispy look the artwork has, but it\'ll work better if you reel it in a bit and distinguish the foreground from the background more.  Also, your anatomy looks kind of melty sometimes, which doesn\'t always work.  However, I think I enjoyed this battle more than all of your others.  

Puzzlething
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# 17   Posted: Sep 22 2007, 04:33 PM
   Oh man I\'m glad you liked the story, I was so worried I was totally messing up Swallow. Next time I fight somebody, especially somebody as complex as Swallow, I\'m gonna interview the artist.

    Dude I thought your comic was amazing. The backgrounds really blew me away and whatever you use to ink, I definitely want to use it. All the lines had great quality and it felt so effortless and real. OH MAN, did you see the way we both used a similar arm transformation, that was so weird. The blue shadows and yellow details combined with the pink borders was really cool, I wouldn\'t have been brave enough to try that color scheme and it came out awesome. You helped me to understand that you should get your shit in on the deadline, no matter what. I totally wouldn\'t have completed this battle if I hadn\'t talked to you. We should totally battle again sometime. And seconded the crits request, each one is a bamillion times better than any vote.

Craqued
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# 16   Posted: Sep 22 2007, 01:48 PM
OKAY OKAY man Puzzle was your comic great HAHAH i am honored to be scarred by such a great little story! And I LOVE the way you depicted her! I also especially love your backgrounds for some reaons, like LOVE love them plus the color schemes and alll with the black borders and everything gives it a certain mood. AND it was stinkin\' funny too. So awesome!

I gotta apologize for mine, most of the inking was done while driving in a car, at the beach, and in the middle of classes so I yea, Mokuu a ruler was pointless and didn\'t have any time to add readable text. Very sad. And whats even more annoying is I was hip hopping between a more serious story/style but then it slowly got kind of gumby-ish and so I made it neither serious or funny just awkward. Which sucks. And yea, the only reason I submitted was to show I at least tried to do something no matter how ugly it is. I\'m so sorry Puzzle! But thanks for the battle it was immensely fun! We\'ll have to battle again under different circumstances ey? <3 and more crits please please please

Mokuu
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# 15   Posted: Sep 22 2007, 07:44 AM
Puzzlething: Your characters and your backgrounds blend too easily: Darktones on Darktones less saturated colors on less saturated colors, thin line weight on thin line weight. Try to spice it up with some variation, maybe using a various mediums for different elements. Aside from that, get down and serious with figure drawing, many of the limbs you\'ve drawn are either too thing, long or are attached to disproportionate bodies and faces. This can completely \"break\" a drawing at times. Yet, i do like your traditional approach and i believe that you can kick it up a notch by amping up the basic techniques : Atmospheric perspective, line weight, tones, etc.
Keep it up !

Craqued: I really don\'t know what to say here. I dunno if you had a some events eating your free time or anything else. Yet where was your ruler and your fonts when you needed them? I mean, your entry would have looked so much cleaner if you had used a ruler for these panels, free hand was gutsy i give you that. And also, your line weight is all around the place, your backgrounds sometimes have thicker line weight than your character -INFRONT- of them. Anyway, you submitted, no surrender, fight or die!

CrimsonViper38
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# 14   Posted: Sep 21 2007, 11:54 PM
too drunk to comment so i\'ll just gush over the 9-10 pg battle. Gave it to puzzle for the comprehensive, ambitious plot. Swallow was great too, and she too will \'pimp again\'. only scarred.
great job you two

Red
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# 13   Posted: Sep 20 2007, 07:40 PM
I\'m soo proud of you for finishing, Puzzle. I doubted that you could get that much work done, yeah go take a rest man hahah. I can\'t wait to see it all done!!! alkasjdf!!

Puzzlething
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# 12   Posted: Sep 20 2007, 06:28 PM
PS THANKS FOR THE FIGHT SWALLOW. I can\'t wait to see your side and thanks for keeping with the fight even though it took so long to start.

Puzzlething
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# 11   Posted: Sep 20 2007, 06:27 PM
  YEEAAAAAAAAAAH BOOOYYYYY, UPLOADED. Oh man, that was so close, I seriously didn\'t think I was gonna make it. Even I lose horrible and get stuck with like a toaster for a head I am so proud I met the deadline. I\'m gonna go crash now.

Craqued
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# 10   Posted: Sep 20 2007, 03:03 AM
Man I need a break after this WHEW this is a level down but at least I produced...something. Ah well THANKS FOR THE FIGHT PUZZLE <3

orenkie
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# 9   Posted: Aug 29 2007, 09:18 PM
I can woot woot for one or da other...damn...EVERY BODY! KICK SOME ASS!

I wanna see blood, guts, brains, ass and scratch scratch!

Nachte
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# 8   Posted: Aug 25 2007, 04:21 PM
GO GO GO CRAQUED ;u ; swallow is soooooooo cooollllllll

Red
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635 comments
# 7   Posted: Aug 24 2007, 11:59 AM
finally!!! it only took you guys a million years to get it together haha! SCAR THAT BITCH UP!!

Aluísio C. Santos
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# 6   Posted: Aug 24 2007, 07:04 AM
Swallow jazz! Now!

Hero Karma
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# 5   Posted: Aug 24 2007, 05:11 AM
Jazz is too hardcore for a normal match.

Qyzex
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# 4   Posted: Aug 24 2007, 12:10 AM
oh drat. Not a death? I guess Merk will NEVER be avenged. :(

good luck goize

Kozispoon
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# 3   Posted: Aug 23 2007, 11:16 PM
And our victor rises from her first spectacular battle to bring us even more mayhem. Scar \'em good you puzzlething you. Scar \'em good. >:3

rabbitrabbit
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# 2   Posted: Aug 23 2007, 11:12 PM
Yesssssss!  FINALLY~~!  

Fcuk each other up, you two!  :D  

Monday
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# 1   Posted: Aug 23 2007, 10:32 PM
I see you\'re not here to KILL anyone today

Comic Details -

 
Type: Scar Match
Drawing Time: 4 weeks
Ended: Sep 28th, 2007
Votes Cast: 42
Page Views: 810
Winner: Puzzlething

 

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