Shrapnel Girl vs. Bob the Destroyer

Shrapnel Girl vs. Bob the Destroyer

by 4:00am

46.5%
544 points
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by Shintsu

53.5%
626 points
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squid
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# 17   Posted: Dec 13 2007, 07:42 AM
4- Love the shark rocket concept. Your comic was very good up until the last page where you just left the story hanging. Art-wise, it looks like your drawings are solid, page 3 is very nice in particular, but I felt that your coloring was very messy and kind of overwhelmed your nice inks.

shintsu- You kept losing me throughout the comic.. I didn\'t realise at first that he was having flashbacks.. I think you need to more clearly differentiate between the panels that are flash-backs and those that are present time. Page 2, the panel layout is much too busy. Go for simple layouts, what\'s inside the panels is much more important.
Your inks are lovely, but I think they lack clarity... I mean I usually I can tell what was happening within panels, but they feel cluttered. I think it is because your backgrounds are very busy and they are distracting the reader\'s eyes from the foreground characters. Go easy on background hatching next time... try being more precise with your shading? The last panel of page 8 is working the best, for me.. OMG so SO lovely! See, the characters stand out against the background, the background itself is nice but that\'s not what you want to look at.. the characters are the focus. HAHA I hope I\'m helping and not screwing you up!
Why did you put \"End\" on page 8 if the comic kept going?

ransak-the-reject
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25 comments
# 16   Posted: Dec 13 2007, 07:34 AM
4 in the morning, I\'m saddened by how short this was cause it seems like the shark rocket had a lot of promise (something in it reminds of austin powers with the whole sharks and laser beams attached to their heads) When you were good it was really good but when things seemed rushed it looked really rushed. All in all I was pleasantly entertained.

Shintsu, you can weave one hell of a story dude. I like the strength of your lines and yeah at times the cross hatching can get a bit hectic, but I thinik it adds to the overall style more than it takes away with confusion or whatever. Look forward to your next strip.

Angie
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# 15   Posted: Dec 12 2007, 12:57 AM
4:00am-I wish you\'d been able to finish, I was interested in seeing how Shrapnel changed and how you had improved since your last battle. You were doing great with your backgrounds but the blurryness of some of the panels really got in the way. I would love to see more stuff like page 3 from you because that was a very strong page. But after that it kind of falls apart.

Shintsu-I really love the inks dude! I do however feel as if this match was a step down for you. I had a hard time what was going on throughout the match and the vague action panels didn\'t help much either. Try to show the viewer exactly what is happening instead of implying it to make it easier on the viewer. The story left quite a bit to desire so I would like to see you work on your writing more in the future.

ColonelXonik
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# 14   Posted: Dec 11 2007, 07:47 PM
Shintsu - I\'m loving that style! The fact it was black and white let your excellent inks stand out. Very good stuff there...very enjoyable.

But man, 4:00am...I\'ll admit, I haven\'t been on the site for a while so I haven\'t kept up as well as I should\'ve but...I think I\'ve seen better from you. The colors were a bit miscoordinated and were very distracting, so I\'d suggest either going black and white or working on a tighter color scheme. I know you\'re not going for subdued, but this fell a little off the deep end. Also, I\'d prefer a different font for your text...it was a little mundane and easy to glance over. It didn\'t have the sweeping grandness your pencils convey, which, I must say, are the part of this comic that shine the most. But those colors really do drag it down....

Aluísio C. Santos
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# 13   Posted: Dec 11 2007, 03:52 PM
omg

4am: D: Hm, while I love things with sharks, let\'s look at the problems here. The quality through the comic is simply inconsistent. You have a blurry first page, then a nice 2nd page, and a fucking awesome 3rd page (btw, i think you\'d benefit from using b&w toned comics, i love your inks), then the 4th page is like very rushed. The small panels in page 2 could be a lot bigger since you used a black space with nothing it them. It\'s not a bad entry though.

Shiiiintsu: damn, god-like inks. I like that you mix between thin lines, and big blacks, and then black brushes, they blend very nicely. There\'s really not much I can say about this, except that it kicks ass, nice plot, and art. I\'d like though, to say that you should watch out when in  a hatching frenzy, like in the car crash/throwing panels, which made them look a bit ughh, but other than that, pure winage.

Good luck, guy and gal!

Wei Ingnan
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597 comments
# 12   Posted: Dec 10 2007, 04:51 PM
ignore the doubled pages on shintsu\'s half.....bug

Shintsu
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15 comments
# 11   Posted: Dec 6 2007, 07:37 PM
10 pages uploaded.

Wei Ingnan
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597 comments
# 10   Posted: Nov 23 2007, 05:33 AM
4:00 am requested an extension....deadline extended for both artists

Powerz
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107 comments
# 9   Posted: Nov 10 2007, 10:48 AM
ohhh this battle will be classy!!! YOU GO GURLS!

alberto311
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349 comments
# 8   Posted: Nov 6 2007, 08:39 AM
Amen! Fight fight fight!!!!

Monday
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932 comments
# 7   Posted: Nov 5 2007, 06:10 PM
why AREN\'T there so many battles all of a sudden ?

Craqued
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202 comments
# 6   Posted: Nov 4 2007, 08:20 PM
NICE

aribooboo
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282 comments
# 5   Posted: Nov 4 2007, 08:11 PM
damn, why are there so many battles all of a sudden?? XD

jho
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485 comments
# 4   Posted: Nov 4 2007, 05:37 PM
wtf  ;_;

QtRNevermore
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286 comments
# 3   Posted: Nov 4 2007, 04:41 PM
4am!!! i miss\'d u lots....awesomeness.

Kageboushi
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10 comments
# 2   Posted: Nov 4 2007, 04:38 PM
Ooooh I\'m excited :D

Aluísio C. Santos
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735 comments
# 1   Posted: Nov 4 2007, 04:35 PM
Mukaiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii

Comic Details -

 
Drawing Time: 4 weeks
Ended: Dec 17th, 2007
Votes Cast: 27
Page Views: 1029
Winner: Shintsu
 

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