Deji, that was just fantastic. You\'ve really improved since your last comic, and the humor was a plus. Like a lot has been saying, my only wish was that you could\'ve added a little more dept in the backgrounds, and I wish I could\'ve witnessed the real Lynnie more instead of the possessed one, though I understand your reasons. Vinca is rapidly growing to me, and she is one of my favorite female characters here in VOID. I am more than excited to see your BB and your next battle with XXO. Please, keep up the good work!
K: I was actually looking very much forward to see your battle ever since you\'ve joined VOID. However, I painfully can relate to your computer\'s best timing on acting up. I had that happen to me once, too. Hopefully next time, we can be lucky enough to see another battle from you. I\'ll go ahead and grade your note page, though, since it did make me chuckle darkly.
Lynnie vs. Vinca Pervinca
Critiques & Comments
# 30
Posted:
Sep 7 2007, 11:46 PM
# 29
Posted:
Sep 7 2007, 09:12 AM
Deji this was AWESOME! I love your style and creativity, so far my favorite from you !!
Vinca is soooo cute <3
Vinca is soooo cute <3
# 28
Posted:
Sep 4 2007, 09:27 AM
@nighty: thankies ^^ I didn\'t have time for cellshading >_<; I hope next time I will thou =3 I need to manage better my time ^^;
@Luni: yeah, my stories are my weak point... I\'m not a good writer ^^;
I waited forever for mamo\'s BB and didn\'t know what to do with the bits of hints he gave me... and K-lyn\'s character... I didn\'t know what to do there either, so tossed up a random thing =/. I have to get better on storywritting >_<;
btw, Lynnie was supposed to be posessed by the \"pervert\" ghost and that\'s why she attacked Vinca ^^; I guess it didn\'t end up looking that clrear.
Thanks for the crit =D
@Luni: yeah, my stories are my weak point... I\'m not a good writer ^^;
I waited forever for mamo\'s BB and didn\'t know what to do with the bits of hints he gave me... and K-lyn\'s character... I didn\'t know what to do there either, so tossed up a random thing =/. I have to get better on storywritting >_<;
btw, Lynnie was supposed to be posessed by the \"pervert\" ghost and that\'s why she attacked Vinca ^^; I guess it didn\'t end up looking that clrear.
Thanks for the crit =D
# 27
Posted:
Sep 4 2007, 08:45 AM
Lyn, that sucks that you didn\'t submit, but I won\'t knock on you for it because I know how life gets. Perhaps next time?
Deji, Great quality! I loved the panel layouts and all. I didn\'t quite get wtf was going on. Maybe something about the other character. She goes from being hungry to... wanting to beat the shit out Vinca? Wut?
I had no idea what happened in that one panel and had to read up on the character to know what was going on. Just odd pacing I guess.
Overall I gave you awesome quality, but tossed in you need to work on your story. It\'s very ... repetitive. People use that bit all the time. I was expecting soemthing a little better after seeing you going along with Mamo\'s BB. (which was awesome)
Great job though.
Deji, Great quality! I loved the panel layouts and all. I didn\'t quite get wtf was going on. Maybe something about the other character. She goes from being hungry to... wanting to beat the shit out Vinca? Wut?
I had no idea what happened in that one panel and had to read up on the character to know what was going on. Just odd pacing I guess.
Overall I gave you awesome quality, but tossed in you need to work on your story. It\'s very ... repetitive. People use that bit all the time. I was expecting soemthing a little better after seeing you going along with Mamo\'s BB. (which was awesome)
Great job though.
# 26
Posted:
Sep 3 2007, 07:50 PM
Deji!! This was such a pretty and fun comic to read <3 even if the encounter was pretty random, I really loved how easy it was to understand it! You can work with panels so neatly, I mean, there was no panel out of place, or occupying innecesary space. Your linework as others have pointed out is so clean and attractive... I just wished there could have been a little cell shading, because it looks so good when you do it. But it was a great entry nonetheless <3
K.... aw :< damn.
K.... aw :< damn.
# 25
Posted:
Sep 2 2007, 08:15 AM
@Dure: thanks ^___^ Well, yeah, Lynn there was very random DX; mainly because I didn\'t know what to do with her, not being able to talk to K in the first 2 weeks.... I\'ll try to pay more attention to my opponent characters and give them more intro time =3
and you know I hate BGs XD; I tried there, haha, but I guess my all-flat coloring didn\'\'t do it for the BGs. Next time I\'ll pay more attention to those details ^^
@Kozi: thankies =D After I re-read oit, yeah, it seemed short to me as well, even if they were 10 pages >_>; (Aoriginally they were 12 teling teh same thing X_X) I\'ll try to make more things happen next time in less page space ^^
and you know I hate BGs XD; I tried there, haha, but I guess my all-flat coloring didn\'\'t do it for the BGs. Next time I\'ll pay more attention to those details ^^
@Kozi: thankies =D After I re-read oit, yeah, it seemed short to me as well, even if they were 10 pages >_>; (Aoriginally they were 12 teling teh same thing X_X) I\'ll try to make more things happen next time in less page space ^^
# 24
Posted:
Sep 1 2007, 06:59 PM
@Deji~ Clean, strong linework, crisp colors- all around nice and neat battle entry. It was really refreshing (visually) to read. The story was short and sweet, which is all well and good, but I would\'ve liked to have more. Then again maybe I just can\'t get enough of your work! Hehe!
@K-Lynnette~ Despite your default, your explanation comic was adorable- totally gave points for the funny. XD
@K-Lynnette~ Despite your default, your explanation comic was adorable- totally gave points for the funny. XD
# 23
Posted:
Sep 1 2007, 01:45 PM
Deji - Haaay Deji. well congratulations on the end of your involuntary hiatus :3 I\'m so glad to see you back and fighting. Now let\'s get some useful critique in. Well honestly there\'s not much to critique XD I think the story works well and this wasn\'t supposed to be a particularly plot important battle, so no need to have some deep storyline. It did feel a bit random to just plot Lynnie there without maybe a bit more of an introduction. The only thing I can really nitpick about are that your background buildings/props looked a bit flat at times. Keep in mind buildings are not like entirely flat surfaces, windowsills, doorways, etc, all have depth. But other than that :3 terrific battle.
K-Lynette - Well, unfortunately not much I can say here, tis obvious you were forced to default by conditions outside of your control. What completely boggles my mind is that K\'s side, which, for all practical purposes is a default, is getting a 20% score :/, which is by no means Ks fault or doing. Just makes me ponder on the criteria people use in order to vote in Void Battles.
K-Lynette - Well, unfortunately not much I can say here, tis obvious you were forced to default by conditions outside of your control. What completely boggles my mind is that K\'s side, which, for all practical purposes is a default, is getting a 20% score :/, which is by no means Ks fault or doing. Just makes me ponder on the criteria people use in order to vote in Void Battles.
# 22
Posted:
Sep 1 2007, 07:54 AM
I talked to lynn beforehand and she told me about her problems... =X I was very sad whe had those problems and she couldn\'t finishe her battle, but I hope she can finish it and submit it as a BB sometime soon =3
@Q: thanks =D drool is love, hehe X3
@K: I\'m glad you liked it =D I was scared you\'d hate me for turning Lynn into a posessed-psycho-perverted girl XD;;;
@Mause: thankies! =D yeah, this one is way bettr than my last one, I\'m pretty happy about it =D
And yeah, that spinning shovel looked weird ^^; I just didn\'t know how to portray it properly DX; Next time I\'ll try to make things like that more clear, thanks for the tips =3
@Q: thanks =D drool is love, hehe X3
@K: I\'m glad you liked it =D I was scared you\'d hate me for turning Lynn into a posessed-psycho-perverted girl XD;;;
@Mause: thankies! =D yeah, this one is way bettr than my last one, I\'m pretty happy about it =D
And yeah, that spinning shovel looked weird ^^; I just didn\'t know how to portray it properly DX; Next time I\'ll try to make things like that more clear, thanks for the tips =3
# 21
Posted:
Sep 1 2007, 07:45 AM
Lynn - It might just be me, but it does seem like alot of voiders have been having computer troubles these days. It sucks that you lost your work, and I was looking forward to seeing your comic. Though, don\'t think you\'ve failed completely because of this. Whenever you get the motivation, you can always re-submit your comic as a beyond battle.
Deji - Hahahaha my goodness I absolutely enjoyed this all over! The quality has greatly improved since your first match, as the linework and coloring is very smooth and clean. The drooling Lynette was also priceless and very expressive. There\'s not too much I could nitpick on, but there have been parts where I notice that the backgrounds are a bit flat without shadows and light values ( page 3 with the three buildings behind lynn for example ). This isn\'t that big of a deal, since you can already easily tell where the characters are.
On page 6 I had slight trouble making out the action sequence with the shovel. At first I thought Lynn was just twirling it around untill i realized it was aiming for Vinca\'s ankles.
Maybe if you showed the shovel connecting right at her legs, the next panel over would have registered a little more fluently.
Otherwise, I\'m very impressed and...you got yourself a fan. <3
Deji - Hahahaha my goodness I absolutely enjoyed this all over! The quality has greatly improved since your first match, as the linework and coloring is very smooth and clean. The drooling Lynette was also priceless and very expressive. There\'s not too much I could nitpick on, but there have been parts where I notice that the backgrounds are a bit flat without shadows and light values ( page 3 with the three buildings behind lynn for example ). This isn\'t that big of a deal, since you can already easily tell where the characters are.
On page 6 I had slight trouble making out the action sequence with the shovel. At first I thought Lynn was just twirling it around untill i realized it was aiming for Vinca\'s ankles.
Maybe if you showed the shovel connecting right at her legs, the next panel over would have registered a little more fluently.
Otherwise, I\'m very impressed and...you got yourself a fan. <3
# 20
Posted:
Aug 31 2007, 07:04 PM
Deji, it\'s made of pure own <3 Thanks for agreeing to partake in this even though I... failed... XD
# 19
Posted:
Aug 31 2007, 06:52 PM
...drool. the drool. i have never seen drool drawn soo.. sweetly. awesome stuff dej! ;P
# 18
Posted:
Aug 30 2007, 04:18 PM
why does everyone\'s computer crash when they have battles due?!?! D:
# 17
Posted:
Aug 30 2007, 12:01 PM
Sorry I couldn\'t submit my entry guys D: I lost it >< my computer crashed and I can\'t access over two thirds of the work in my backup, the pages included DX please understand D:
# 16
Posted:
Aug 30 2007, 03:39 AM
WHere the fuck is Lynetteeeeeeeeeeeeeey
# 15
Posted:
Aug 29 2007, 07:56 PM
done....! *faints*
It came out better than the last one, I\'m happy ^___^
but again, if I had procrastinated less, I could have done better...
PROCRASTINATION IS NOT GOOD >o<!!!~~~
It came out better than the last one, I\'m happy ^___^
but again, if I had procrastinated less, I could have done better...
PROCRASTINATION IS NOT GOOD >o<!!!~~~
# 14
Posted:
Aug 29 2007, 07:31 PM
almost time for awesome-saucey-ness? best of luck lynnie!
# 13
Posted:
Aug 28 2007, 12:34 AM
go go go go! 2 days left, team!
# 12
Posted:
Aug 26 2007, 08:52 PM
Go, Lynnie, go. O<
# 11
Posted:
Aug 24 2007, 05:42 AM
i look forward for to Lyn\'s first battle....
# 10
Posted:
Aug 22 2007, 01:02 PM
Go Deji go!
*can\'t wait*
*can\'t wait*
# 9
Posted:
Aug 19 2007, 09:51 AM
have a good battle
# 8
Posted:
Aug 9 2007, 08:56 PM
Go go Vinca! *pom poms*
And let\'s see what you\'ve got, Lynnie!
And let\'s see what you\'ve got, Lynnie!
# 7
Posted:
Aug 8 2007, 07:27 PM
Best of wishes on your first fight K Lynnette!
And Deji....great to see you back in action <3
And Deji....great to see you back in action <3
# 6
Posted:
Aug 5 2007, 07:58 AM
Great to see you back in action Deji! Good luck to the both of you!
# 5
Posted:
Aug 4 2007, 05:49 AM
Gud luk deji
# 4
Posted:
Aug 2 2007, 11:36 PM
Nice, can\'t wait for this.
# 3
Posted:
Aug 2 2007, 09:46 AM
Sweetness! Bring the pain you two!
# 2
Posted:
Aug 1 2007, 01:04 PM
AMnesiacs UNITE
# 1
Posted:
Aug 1 2007, 12:57 PM
ooooooh what a good match up! Good Luck, both of you!
Regular Match
Drawing Time:
4 weeks
Ended:
Sep 7th, 2007
Votes Cast:
42
Page Views:
2872
Winner:
Dejichan
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@Yuki: yeah, I need to work on my bgs >_o; actually this is the first time I draw sequentials with nbgs other than non-silhouette or trees XD;
I fel I improved a lot =3 even if my scores were pretty much the same than the last fight ^^; I feel I\'m improving with every thummb I do! I felt this battle was too short, even if they were 9 pages... so I\'m trying to make more things happen on each page now =3
Thanks ^___^