Yun-Jin-Sun vs. Girl
Critiques & Comments
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132 comments
# 14
Posted:
May 2 2006, 11:21 AM
Frame 3 of KevJB\'s last page exploded.....=_=\'
# 13
Posted:
Apr 26 2006, 06:38 PM
great work Angelsilvestre i give it a thumbs up but u still need to work on ur grammer
# 12
Posted:
Apr 25 2006, 05:08 PM
jb> i see the good thing about your digital drawings and stuff in the first couple of pages the it just turns to crap. i like the wire frame it looks cool but not enough to make me vote you winner... if you dont have time try fighting one person at a time... next time so i can see your best work.
Jun i like it. keep up the good work. ps try inking some of it next time even if its just one page...you gonna have to at one point.
Jun i like it. keep up the good work. ps try inking some of it next time even if its just one page...you gonna have to at one point.
# 11
Posted:
Apr 25 2006, 02:54 PM
Aww, Girl... I was expecting better from you. If you\'re swamped, just try for one battle at a time. We can\'t all be Momaru. Better luck to you next time.
# 10
Posted:
Apr 23 2006, 07:03 PM
Alas, KevJB- dissipointing. Incomplete pages. Tisk tisk. However, you get points for submitting SOMETHING, and not defaulting.
Angel, Cute character, and I like your style! The grammer is a little something to worry about, but that\'s already been said. Your panel layouts- I LOVE EM. The story isn\'t very captivating, the whole \"She has dyed hair too\"- well, she\'d be fighting nearly half the chars on void. lol It\'s cute though.
As for anything else, the only thing odd is the size of that girl\'s hair! WHOO. That\'s some styling. lol
Anyways, awsome job. Lets see some color next time, as well as finished fights.
Angel, Cute character, and I like your style! The grammer is a little something to worry about, but that\'s already been said. Your panel layouts- I LOVE EM. The story isn\'t very captivating, the whole \"She has dyed hair too\"- well, she\'d be fighting nearly half the chars on void. lol It\'s cute though.
As for anything else, the only thing odd is the size of that girl\'s hair! WHOO. That\'s some styling. lol
Anyways, awsome job. Lets see some color next time, as well as finished fights.
# 9
Posted:
Apr 23 2006, 02:34 PM
i wont whine about the english, even though the grammer was incorrect, any person could make out what you were trying to say. great job though. i loved the art. but in some places i just couldnt tell who was who because it was a bit sketchy in some places. but nice fight overall.
girl... tsk tsk, i was hoping for something better. but alas! good luck next time
girl... tsk tsk, i was hoping for something better. but alas! good luck next time
# 8
Posted:
Apr 23 2006, 05:00 AM
I\'m having a hard time to figure who deserves better voting, Angel\'s battle was perhaps finished, but the english was. . .yeah, what other people said, it really ruined moist of the comic due to this,
Girl\'s battle looked rather promising in the first pages, but sadly it didn\'t get finished, which is really a shame.
Girl\'s battle looked rather promising in the first pages, but sadly it didn\'t get finished, which is really a shame.
# 7
Posted:
Apr 23 2006, 04:40 AM
Angel: Watch your perspective it\'s a bit weird in some areas that don\'t seem intentionally off. and get your grammar checked, it was tough reading.
Kev: Nice first two pages. Perspective is off in a few panels and your hands on some characters look a bit iffy. The unfinished pages look like they would have been really good, but they are not done. So, yea, finishing would have helped. Alot.
Kev: Nice first two pages. Perspective is off in a few panels and your hands on some characters look a bit iffy. The unfinished pages look like they would have been really good, but they are not done. So, yea, finishing would have helped. Alot.
# 6
Posted:
Apr 23 2006, 03:13 AM
okay, here we go.
Angel: I\'m going to assume that English isn\'t your first language? In that case, please have someone you know who does speak it edit your comic before finalizing it. If this isn\'t the case, get someone to edit it anyways. Reading your comic, while pretty, was painfully difficult due to the terrible grammar. Just keep that in mind, please.
Kev: Pretty good, but definitely turn in completed work next time. Instead of stretching yourself over a bunch of pages, spend a lot of time working on just a few. Doing two fights in such short sucession probably wasn\'t the best idea, unless you\'ve got loads of time. Still, I did like what was finished, and I hope to see more of it in the future.
Angel: I\'m going to assume that English isn\'t your first language? In that case, please have someone you know who does speak it edit your comic before finalizing it. If this isn\'t the case, get someone to edit it anyways. Reading your comic, while pretty, was painfully difficult due to the terrible grammar. Just keep that in mind, please.
Kev: Pretty good, but definitely turn in completed work next time. Instead of stretching yourself over a bunch of pages, spend a lot of time working on just a few. Doing two fights in such short sucession probably wasn\'t the best idea, unless you\'ve got loads of time. Still, I did like what was finished, and I hope to see more of it in the future.
# 5
Posted:
Apr 22 2006, 12:10 AM
It\'s a terrible thing to realize you only have 8 hours left and you\'ve only done one page...
# 4
Posted:
Apr 12 2006, 06:36 PM
At last you got Yun into another battle! Good luck guys! !
# 3
Posted:
Apr 9 2006, 12:45 PM
awesome, gl Silvestre, and to JB also
# 2
Posted:
Apr 7 2006, 11:25 AM
Ahhh Kev two battles at the same time . . . it might help if you did both with the same story arc.
Just a suggestion. Good luck.
Just a suggestion. Good luck.
# 1
Posted:
Apr 7 2006, 05:27 AM
OMG YUN TOOK GIRLS VIRGINITY! XD lol
Good luck to you both! =)
Good luck to you both! =)
Regular Match
Drawing Time:
2 weeks
Ended:
Apr 30th, 2006
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39
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Winner:
ANGELsilvestre
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